This November

Behind the old warehouse

A dance in the snow

I groove to your music

My feelings aren't low

 

Because you are the one

The one I see at night

The one I long to hold

To make everything right

 

The snow falls down

The streetlights gleam gold

Where is my heart

To you it is sold

 

As the moon falls down

So does this mood

The dance is now over

It ended too soon

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

One of your best. I really like this one...:)....................

[J Johnson III]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:).......

[Savanna]

lovely poem keep on writing ^_^

[J Johnson III]

Thank you for your kind words.

[Savanna]

Welcome ^_^

[MomzillaNC]

I saw you'd entered this in the same contest I just entered. This is an interesting poem, tinged with loss. I like the delicate touch. I don't see how it's "gut-wrenching," but it's good.

[J Johnson III]

A great relationship that just ended. It's "gut-wrenching" for at least one party. Thank you for the kind words and best wishes on the contest.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. Gook luck to you too.

[J Johnson III]

Thankssss.(need at least 10 characters lol)

[MomzillaNC]

yvw :D

[DoormanDan]

I love the rhyming scheme you used for this poem. This poem is beautifully written. Thank you for sharing this brilliant piece with the world!

[J Johnson III]

Thank you for your kind words!

[DoormanDan]

No problem, It's always great to read and review awesome writing!

[zZeal]

Making the words dance :) pleasure reading, a good one.

[J Johnson III]

Thank you, I appreciate it!

[zZeal]

Welcome :)

[Marina]

i love this. i love the scene and the imagery you create. the dance you describe is surrounded by solemness. thanks for sharing :)

[J Johnson III]

Thank you for the kind words. I appreciate them.