The calm before the storm.

Poem - fiction.

It's only half past the point of no return,

The world stands still, and it's cast draws a breath,

Hanging from a thread,

Suspended from a ledge.

The pendulum sways,

The die have yet to land,

The hourglass is only part filled with sand.

The pen poised on the paper,

The glass seconds from the smash,

The candle nears the end of the wax,

Waiting to be struck, is the match.

The breath before the kiss,

The unfurling of a fist,

The unfinished list, and the moment to be missed.

The calm before the storm,

The drought before the flood,

The would, the could, the should.

Reviews

[Re-Pete]

I like this a lot. You've really nailed it here. Captures that moment very nicely. Many great lines. Good ending.

[Annabee90]

Thank you so much Pete - I'm glad you enjoyed it! I look forward to reading some of your work :)

[alanwgraham]

This is excellent - I really like this. The simplicity and repetitiveness make it very strong. Can I point to one or two things that might be improved (just my opinion!). Your title is 'the calm before the storm' but not all your lines describe this - eg the unfurling of a fist. Also I wasn't too sure about the meaning of the first two lines (but i am not too good at interpreting poetry!) . I've found myself that getting constuctive input has allowed me to pick up a lot of things I missed.
Well done - I do like your very spare style!
Alan

[Annabee90]

Hi Alan, thank you very much for your feedback. I welcome constructive criticism and find it really helps my work. I completely see where you're coming from with your points :) so thank you! I often return to my drafts and make small changes so I will certainly bear your opinions in mind. I look forward to reading your work also! Many thanks, Anna

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

I really enjoyed the read and every moment of imagination while reading your lines. The rhymes goes perfect throughout. The calm before the storm such a beautiful title. Nice work :)

[Annabee90]

Thank you so much - I was a little unsure about the rhyme so it's nice to know you think it turned out well :) look forward to reading some of your work!

[Writer at last! Sky ~]

Yes absolutely your rhymes as well as your poem is fantastic. Keep writing and your most welcome :)

[Annabee90]

Thank you Adam, what a lovely review! I am glad that my poem was able to speak to you in some way.

I am really looking forward to reading more of your work too! It's great to have other writer's to learn from, and offer inspiration, such as yourself.

[Adam Adams]

quite an bewitching reply it is you seem to be get yourself licked into. as always, highly appreciative.
you seem to have very much to speak so i guess, i must be here to listen. xoxo

[Adam Adams]

that, i would say, is really a very perfumic as well as a captivating pottery of poetry you've come up with. so much virtue of love-life, & its happenings with adventures have you captured in shortened words. apart that, the choice of your title's also very admirable. well suited with your verse! rhythmic. soft. catchy, & absolutely a way majestic poetry it is. nicely done.

would be looking forward to readin' your work!