Left behind.

I left so much behind,

And I collected a lot much in the meantime,

Whatever I had lost behind.

I tried to run ahead,

But the rocks holding me, were behind and not ahead.

So, I looked behind and never ahead.

I thought, I was drowning.

But, there wasn't any water, surrounding.

So, I just went with the flow and kept on drowning.

The sky was a million light years away,

But, I was also away from the ground, far far away.

The sky was inches apart,

But, I let go and flew away.

The Hope was there, all the time.

But, I thought it was a lock,

And the key wasn't there, at any time.

But the lock was already open, Everytime,

And, never saw it, wasting away all my dimes.

I left so much behind,

And I collected a lot which wasn't mine.

Never noticed that I hadn't lost anything behind......

Reviews

[Eddie Phillips]

The poem emphasizes the idea of things around you holding you back and not giving a person relief. It is very powerful. The fac that you broke it up in stanzas gives it an episodic approach that pushes the idea throughout the poem. This was a great poem. I enjoyed it immensely.

[Anjali]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked this.

[ElizaB]

Hey,

Thank you for entering your poem.

The fact that the stanzas were short allowed for fluidity and the story to develop. I enjoyed the presence of hope in your piece and for somebody so young I feel that it is important to never lose sight of hope as it allows you to carry on in times of struggle.

Thanks again!

[Anjali]

Thank you so much for reading and for the sweet words!

[rylesconroy]

I love how it aches me just a lit bit inside because it reminds me of being stuck in a place where I felt like I was being held down. But the only to be free was right in front of me and I just needed to let go. I love reading things I relate to and I think that's what readers like the most. I've read a couple more of you're writings and I've not disliked any so far so keep doing what you're doing.

[Anjali]

Thank you so much for your sweet words...it really means a lot!

[Pravir]

Very well written . . . every line filled with emotions.. "I left so much behind,
And I collected a lot which wasn't mine."
This was the best line and its very true . . . people never value what they have. . . keep sharing

[Anjali]

Thanks!!😊

[Surya]

Sometimes it happens before a miracle....
End was realised realisation that made all come alive...I liked it...:)

[Anjali]

Thanks for reading!!

[Farhan Shaikh]

Sensitive piece, though it is very well penned and very good poetry and good use of words as well

[Anjali]

Thanks for stopping by!

[Najam Us Saher]

Thoughtful...It feels that it took lots of courage to write this one....beautifully written...

[Anjali]

Thank you!

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome.

[Abhishek Asthana]

the repetitions of words are so good... i was bit connected when i was going through... sensitive piece of writing :)

[Anjali]

Thanks for reading!!