Your Karma Pays You Back Soon!

Here's a short story of how your karma will pay you back sooner. So Always try to keep it simple silly!

"He left her on a rainy day

He never saw her tears!"

Present Day:

She has beautiful eyes

People compliment her not knowing how much pain and suffering her eyes have endured

Rewinding the Past:

Her eyes met his

His eyes met hers

Their heart beats synced

Cupid strike and Love Blossomed

They were deeply into each other

Unaware of the future

Family Reprimanded

Society Warned

Yet they faced the storm and hurdles together

Their love stayed strong and the trust lasted longer

Not knowing when they can take it to another level

She was his support

He was the whole world to her

And their love was epic for many years

One day Suddenly, they lost touch with each other

Unknown and Unaware of the mighty storm along with a three letter word "EGO" had the strength to break a twelve letter word "RELATIONSHIP" of so many years

He bid her the last GOODBYE on a rainy day

He never saw her tears

She bade the last GOODBYE KISS to her WHOLE WORLD OF JOY

The storm parted their ways

He got himself a pretty looking wife

She was left alone, aloof, lonely, dejected, sad, depressed, derailed

Breathing yet dead inside

Her burning soul had no clue what to do next!

Her best friends supported her by lighting the died out flame inside her

She thought herself to be a loner

But in reality, her CREATOR- GOD was with her

She cried her heart out

Replaced her painful tears through night into her smiling face at day

Realized too much love, care and trust broke her heart

Braced herself up to face her emotional struggles and hardships

Determined to achieve something worthy for herself

She didn't fail but learned a lesson so tough

She smiled to ward off her sadness

And embraced herself on the mission to love herself and spread love across the dejected ones

Her smile and positive vibes won her many admirers

Her innocence and childishness won her the priceless friendships of small kids

She realized herself as a precious creation of the Almighty to spread her wings of joy, love, and happiness across the world

Fast Forward to Present Day:

She has beautiful eyes

People compliment her not knowing how much pain and suffering her eyes have endured

Along this journey, her soul re-energized and awakened to a precious wisdom knowing herself

She forgave her sinner and moved on with grace up until

He approached her 

Trying to grab her attention again on her journey by crossing in front of her vehicle 

Her response to Him, "Dude, I don't drink and drive or speed my car to lose control over it and leave the road or climb on people over the footpath!" :P :D

She's no longer the person

He once knew

For He was the one who left her alone to suffer the pain of a broken relationship

She learned her lesson the tough way 

Though initially, She could not see beyond the darkness,

But when She was guided by her friends and family

All She realized was Her problems left her alone

She was indeed left with many precious things- her happiness, soul, family, friends, freedom, dignity, self-confidence, respect and goal

She was left with whom she called her great friends with blossoming heart inside

They called her the winner of many ups and downs

And the ever devastating hurdles of life

They encouraged her saying 

She has the power within her to change the world

So she did a great job and made it possible

Like the morning sunshine, She shined bright after the dark night

Thus She lived happily ever after

Author's Note

Thank you for reading!
I am an amateur writer, so expecting your honest reviews, advises and criticism.

Reviews

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Wow, so nice dear. So engaging this write, I lked it very much. The flow of the story, past, present and then rewind and fast forward, really wonderful. Best line was he did not see her tear and not driving drinking.... That stanza. Awesome.... Keep writing... Xo

[Anjali]

Thanks a lot for liking it!

[aLittlePain]

Hello Anjali, I enjoyed this piece was simply told but done very well. It reads as a very heartfelt piece which is a nice connector for us. I liked your images they certainly added effect to the story overall. Perhaps you will try to add colour and flavour to your next piece by considering richer word choices? I applaud your first attempt Anjali, all instances on here are an opportunity for learning and sharing. Regards Ray xo

[Anjali]

Thanks for dropping by Ray... I will consider adding richer word choices in the next for sure.

[Neal S]

I enjoyed this. The mixture of writing and pictures gave it a old storybook type feel alone with that lovely happy ending. Nice work.

[Anjali]

Thanks a lot Neal for going through my story. Well, yeah an old storybook type feel is what I liked the most during my childhood and till now I relish reading something with the pictures. That's the only reason also reflecting in my writing :)

[Christian Bonoan]

The story is very touching! the pictures surely helped me to feel and see the emotions! Nice story!

[Anjali]

Thanks a lot Christian for reviewing my writing :)

[Raymond]

Man, I can tell this came from the heart. Marvelous Story and the pictures worked well with it

[Anjali]

Thank you so much Raymond for reviewing my writing. Your views means a lot to me :)

[Ashwin Shanker]

I found the story very intriguing. The visuals which you have kept in between have aided the words to have an emotional effect. However I felt that the wording to be a bit generic. The reader could be able to personally relate to the protagonist if you could mention a few specific instances or characteristics of the girl or the boy which makes them and their affair unique.
Another recommendation would be if you could bring a uniformity in the images that are used in the interim. If you could maintain a specific pattern in the imagery throughout the story/poem, it would immensely accentuate the emotional appeal. Maybe you can try this for your next work.
All the best.

[Anjali]

Thank you Ashan for your constructive review, will consider it for my next work for sure :)

[Bala Gorthi]

Nice story. Keep writing and keep sharing.

[Anjali]

Thank you Bala for your reviews and encouragement.

[M P Ramesh]

Anjali,
The union and separation are the inevitable parts of life and hence a serious matter for the writing.The life , always abundant with choices and chances which we identify as luck etc has also no exception. The writer like all, means death, love, passion, lust, hate, pain, bliss, peace etc has to tackle it vehemently and with purpose so as to make a vision to the reader. However short and miscrafted and whatever else the masters and critics say, it may fill the cup with fresh hand experience. This does not mean that all experiences a can only be rendered in to works. Yours or others will make the purpose. This happens unintentionally. Thats the issue. This means creation. The reins of creation is even unknown to the writer. HE/SHE happens to be a channel.....yes a channel only ..no ownership is produced.
The purpose is served as far as reader is concerned with above. What else is needed for its creator?

excellent attempt indeed.

Carry on............

mp

[Anjali]

Thanks a lot MP for the honest review and yes its just a channel! I am surprised you got it through my work accurately.... Feeling happy :)