A Bubble Bath For You

You had a long hard night;
tired and weary you may be,
but you are still beautiful to me.

A warm bubble bath is what
you need, come with me, I'll
take the lead.

I'll run your water and make
sure it's just right; You step
in with all your nakedness
before me; I sigh as I see
the heavenly sight.

You lower yourself ever so slow,
making sure I get a good show;
Asking me to stay and not to go.

Bubbles cover you like a blanket,
wrapping you in all it's warmth.
As the tension fades away, I rub
my hands over your silken skin;
And I fall in love with you
all over again.

Reviews

[Alskar]

The sensuality of the poem is good. The speaker's mesmerized state is clear. However, I repeat myself from the previous poem, you do tend to use clichéd imagery 'bubbles cover you like a blanket', 'heavenly sight', 'silken skin'. The rhyming of 'slow', 'show', and 'go', don't fit in the equation of the rest of the poem and makes it more immature. This poem cries out to be shown, not told.