Bloodlust

 

With eyes the shade of crimson wine,

and hair a wash of midnight’s shine,

you come to me in darkness to find

my sleeping form of incarnate divine.

 

I wake to thee, an ethereal force

wooing me justly without recourse

until I feel my spirit divorce

my body without the slightest remorse,

 

and soon I am floating within your arms

drinking deeply of your forbidden charms

whispering drunkenly as my mind swarms,

and your embrace in me all things disarms.

 

Through an open window we two float,

until even the ground below seems remote,

the heavens open and the stars denote

a path where all things to you I devote,

 

my love, my lust, my pleasure, my life

for you I would become your waiting wife

a loyal servant, please end this strife 

and then I feel the piercing of a knife

 

against my throat, but it cannot be

your mouth is nestled there I can see,

and yet I feel the soft sweet sting of thee

draining my body so that I can be free…

Author's Note

A little Vampiric love... Normally I stick to free-verse, but everyone has to try a little something new every once in a while, right? ;o)

Reviews

[The Xi of Nothing]

I absolutly love the tone of this work. It gives just enough of a sanguine feel to make the romance even more alluring.

[bluessadmood]

oh you know i have to come back ,some more to say,you see in most drama i read this keeps coming up,like:my love i am your death i am your freedom,or:I love you so I want you free,its I ,I am your death,sometimes its he who will sets her free ,at others its she who will sets him free,its like lots are agreed that death is our forever sought freedom,wonderful work as usual ,loved it

[bluessadmood]

oh just lovely... i would become your waiting wife
a loyal servant ,please end this strife
and then i feel the piercing of a knife
you know this is lovely ,i not only knew this as a vampiric piece ,i have read it in many dramas,she, the lover wanted him to end it or he for the love of her ,he did want to set her free ,on the whole this is really ,really great ,what can i say ,the more i read you i want still more,its just great the way you write my friend

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Definitely a different side of sensuality. It's very enticing to read. And I like this even though it's not free verse, it strongly shows your ability to create alluring poems even though you are keeping to a stricter form with rhyming. And the rhymes are good, too. Verses 2,3, and 5 are definitely my favorites. =)

[Fran Marie]

I wake to thee, an ethereal force
wooing me justly without recourse
until I feel my spirit divorce
my body without the slightest remorse,


A deliciously dark piece on the vampires of the night

very well expressed in flowing rhyme, yes, I like this a lot

WelL DonE!! indeed~Fran Marie

[Don Coorough]

This poem reminds me of Coppola's movie, "Bram Stoker's Dracula." I always loved the line Winona Ryder uttered, "Take me away from all this... death." Your rhyming is nice because the choices are not obvious ones. It's not easy to rhyme and still sound intelligent. But, you succeed! One thing, I feel like a couple of the lines have awkward meter when read in conjunction with the rest of the lines. I've been hit hard by editors who have said to me, don't use meter if you cannot stay strictly to it. I mean, golly, I heard that at times when I just changed the stressing in the meter (same number of syllables though). So, if you were to submit a poem to a literary journal that has meter, be careful to keep true to not only the number of syllables, but the way they are stressed (you know: soft hard, soft hard...). I enjoyed the poem though, quite a bit. The fascination here is heightened by your impeccable use of language and tone, mood and setting, and the overall eerieness of the piece. Nice write! - EllisD

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Oh my dear... I am such a big fan of vampires and might I say I have never heard anything more poetically divine when talking bout the creature of the night, seriously this ROCKS... it's great to try something new it helps keep your creative juices fresh and the result here is astounding.