Water

Swelling,
tidal waves of
ferocious intensity,
hurdling toward
infinity in the shape
of rocks and bluffs,
tied to the whims
of a faceless moon

I am water

tears falling
from a silver sky
dancing for only
the time it takes
to dry me up,
but still I drop
tirelessly soldiering
through the endless night

I am water

placid in pools,
calm in countless
lakes and ponds
where I house life,
create life and give
life to beings desperate
with a thirst that only
I can quench

I am water,
the giver and taker,
the ever malleable substance
that rages and in the same breath
falls silent, drifting,
soothing, feeling�

Reviews

[laceyjane23]

Nice job, this is beautiful writing! you have some very well worded lines here, well done!
laceyjane

[K. Aurora]

Now, this was beautiful writing at it's best. Rich in flavor and substance that driped from it's lines and words into vivid and touchable images.

I like it all! It all flowed so well, crafted like a tapestry of threads woven with perfect peace in mind.
Refreshing and full of light.

Great Poem!
Kansas

[bluessadmood]

oh i am water calm in lakes and ponds,harbor life,i make life ,everyone is needs me to quench his thirst,i am forever calm ,forever raging and then calm again ,i run down cheeks ,i fall from sky dancing for time to dry me up but i fall through the night,through the endless night,i am emotions ,i am natures rage ,i am a maker of life and i store life within, oh what great images ,i could go for hours telling about this ,just wonderful..

[Celtic Cat]

Sublime. very, very nice. I love the water, and this poem does it justice. It is quite the powerful current... and being tied to the moon makes it even more lovely. Excellent piece! Very well written!!

[Gordon]

You are good... nuff said!

Love the first stanza and the last most;

Swelling,
tidal waves of
ferocious intensity,
hurdling toward
infinity in the shape
of rocks and bluffs,
tied to the whims
of a faceless moon

Always a fan of your stuff.

[S.J.Floreen]

Oh, what an absolutely beautiful way to describe water!

[BenightedWhispers]

This is fantastic. I love the personification.

[Pink Poison]

I like how this is worded. Water being the essence of life, which it is. We are mainly composed of water and could not live without it. The way that you start out with something big like the ocean and tide to lakes and ponds is nice. Very nice to read.

[Sarah]

I love the idea of becoming water - I used to imagine what it would be like as a child, and it's very similar to the emotions & beautiful imagery that you described in this poem.^^ Excellent job, this was a worthwhile read! =) I especially loved: "tears falling / from a silver sky / dancing for only / the time it takes / to dry me up" :D

[Lab Rat 1984]

All the properties of water written beautifully.