My Little Room

A kid with a depressing past

In this little room, I sit alone, waiting
Black and red all around.
A dark space with no ground.
I am falling, falling to nowhere.
Flying is a word I do not posses,
For I only just fall.
With black and red all around.
A dark space with no ground.
I fall and I fall alone.
All alone.
Just me in my little room.

Author's Note

There is a second part to this poem and I written it down, it's just I lost it but I promise to find it and then I will put it on for everyone to see.

Reviews

[Tinkerbellje]

Short and to the point with that little edge of darkness. Well done :-)

[Angels heart]

Thanks, I write either long or short poems, no middle

[Blissful Sin]

simple. mysterious. and dark
i like it a lot!

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[Angels heart]

Thank you very much

[Darkening Shadow]

For being short, it really packs a punch. Great Write.

[Angels heart]

Feelings is something everything holds ;) even in the small. Thanks for your review

[Darkening Shadow]

Very true.

[Chidoriflower]

This reminds me of Alice in Wonderland, but darker....All alone...so sad....it's kind of a numbing pain. In such phrasal brevity, there are so many emotional and philosophical complexities. To explain, the lines are shorter but the meaning is much deeper. Excellent!

[Angels heart]

Thank you, I think a poem should not just have one feeling behind it but a whole heart full. Also, I want the reader to see their own way of describing the poem if it's an fallen Angel going through it or a dark version of Alice in wonderland :)

[Chidoriflower]

You are very welcome. :D

[Hibiki]

I think this is good.
What in my mind is fallen angel, fall to endless dark hole.

"For I only just fall.
With black and red all around.
A dark space with no ground."

I like this sentences ^^

[Angels heart]

Thank you so much for the review, I never really thought of the person/thing that is feeling and going through the poem, but I like how u think. ;p