SEE...

" ...a joint writing project-- concept and original poem by Jola S...; English interpretation by Mark Teague"

 

SEE.../Zobacz/

 

 

Look!

Soon it will be night,

And before the Dawn, I may see

Another such as me, another frail flower

Playing a sad, soft song in my piano...

 

Can you hear my notes, fragile as butterflies,

Flying out the window, through the storm?

I note that other flowers such as I have died already!

 

 

 

 

See how the player of the guitar

 

Has plunged his face into Darkness,

For he sees me, and he knows...

Knows that my time is short!

 

Can you not see that the meadows

Are painted with Fall's fallen flowers,

Held hostage by their own Nature,

Blinded by the coming winter's hues?

 

 

 

 

Now, sisters, I beg you:

 

Shed your heavy coats,

And shun those who would shield you from Life!

Grow anew your wings, and fly...fly...

Fly out to what awaits you!

 

jola  and mark teague
  October, 2009

Reviews

[David Lewis Paget]

I like the first two verses - very delicate! The next two stanzas introduce a darker element. The meaning of the last verse is somewhat lost on me - the 'heavy coats' for instance. I can't see the point of the huge gaps between sections, either. They tend to indicate that we're dealing with three separate poems here.

[MarkGMelvin]

Different
the guitar and the piano and the flowers,butterflies interesting metaphors

unique is good

peace
wmmelvin

[Dillon Cotter]

astonishing and remarkable! so much emotion, a great variety of wording, truly awesome!

-Will