Watch , Listen, Write

Just a poem ::

 

We are flawed, we struggle.

We can't dance and math makes our head hurt.

There is a vast difference between us and those who are whole

We know this because we are puzzles always in progress,

 

putting ourselves together but not yet the whole.

 

We are strong we know this because when we are broken

We patch the holes with poetry.

 

We live a mystery unraveling.

Ours is the treads of the tapestry

We weave words.

 

Stand, back and look, we are hard to see close up.

It's hard to tell if that is glitter or millions of tiny lights.

Don't worry, if you do not understand

We do not understand , why understanding is important.

 

Our breath is light and easy to hold

So we can swim very deep and not drown.

 

We watch..We listen, We Write.

Naomi Walsh Montana

 

 

 

Author's Note

I am not even sure ..if I like this one.

Reviews

[alan khan]

works like this inspired "you're an idiot"...kidding

[bluessadmood]

Oh my friend ,how i love reading your words..
if there are flaws and struggles then they are the best part of you
to me you are whole..and those considered whole are all fragments
you are never a puzzle to me,you are a beautiful riddle so clear
you are not in progress,God you are already like full moon
you are strong even if you were broken,its where your beauty lies
there are no holes to patch only to ornament whats already so complete
beautiful mystery unraveling to even nicer clarity..you are clear and shiny as the sun
yes we weave words..yes it looks nicer from afar,its a glitter and a million lights
we dont have to understand,its a beauty to be always unknown
this is so lovely..how i always enjoy reading you
lovely write

[Storyteller of Dimensio..]

I have to agree to many things you have written here (for example about math). Also the part about understanding and seeing is very nice.
I especially like the final: "We watch..We listen, We Write." Sum nicely what we do. In a way, we are observers and mirrors to the rest.
This poem is one of the type, I believe, that every writer should write. If you look on the same type from other writers you would found them quiet similar.
There is no reason why not to like this poem. It's well written and natural.
PS: There is no need to have super sized letters, it makes it a bit harder and uncomfortable to read. The normal size will do just fine.

[deeps]

I like this write I found it wonderful.
I agree with Mystic Soul on this.
This is worth the read.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I really like this too, I think it really describes the deep seeded reasons we write... not only to express ourselves but to find a voice for those without one. A very wonderful write.

[mystic soul]

you don't like this one?????? c'mon it's great!! worth reading and appreciation...... i really loved it...

[Theriversown]

I like this,very much. We are puzzles always in progress--that is true and we are always searching for the pieces that we need.....