Pieces are Gone

I have someone i care about who is about to do something stupid. this is for him.

My heart is almost gone,
loved one's taking them away.
Leaving an empty shell behind

Slowly fading into the grasp of darkness,
an empty shell of nothingness.
No feelings, no hope, nothing will be left.

My heart is dispersing, piece by piece,
freainds, family have a girft that will never dwindle,
a gift that will last forever.

Until i can give no more, i will keep giving.
I will stay alive, my feelings will last, my hope will burn on.

The peices to my heart are almost gone,
Almost, but not yet.

Reviews

[Elizabeth Thief]

This is a great piece. It's so intense and powerful.
The whole thing kept my attention
Great job!!!!

[nora]

i love this. its really pretty and sad at the same time. plus, i can relate to the situation :/ loads of people i know are on drugs, etc. and it makes me sad that they're screwing themselves up so badly.

"Until i can give no more, i will keep giving.
I will stay alive, my feelings will last, my hope will burn on.
The peices to my heart are almost gone,
Almost, but not yet."

i love this part! it shows that the narrator will like, keep on shining and giving until there's nothing left to give. it gives the reader a sense of like, hope or something. its really beautiful.
this is a wonderful poem, angelofsorrow. keep it upp :D