City of Life

Sing to ye god !

His ears are open 

Filtered to lies

Bestowed in sweat 

People who speak

Are people who pray

Give ye strength to do !

Mountains will be moved 

Grief will be lifted

Halos will be gifted 

A ticket will be granted

One way ride

Vacation for life

Above all else

The City Of Life 

Reviews

[Eric Pudalov]

Beautiful poem! In a way, it reminds of Biblical verses. The only thing I might change is the rhyming of "lifted" and "gifted." It would be fine if the whole poem had a rhyme scheme, but it takes away something when it doesn't match the rest. Perhaps you can find a synonym for "gifted," like given, that still matches the rhythm of the poem. Still, excellent work!! Keep it up and continue your wonderful writing.

And by the way, thank you for your comments on my work as well. It feels great to share with such an appreciative and talented community of writers.

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful and powerful words. I like the energy and the hope in your words. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[RichGee]

Wow! Beautiful work...powerful and real!