Abyss

In the abyss

We jumped into the abyss head first

Crashing with desire and lust

No chains to hold us

No eyes to watch us

No judgment

 

No neighbors

To hear out moans of pleasure

No husbands or wives

To  break our fantasy

 

In darkness we are free

In darkness we love

In darkness we hope we could stay

But light always find its way

The chains

The eyes

The judgments

The neighbors

The husbands and wives

Always find their way

Author's Note

Sometimes I wish i could let my my darkside take over...

Reviews

[Mister_Sir]

Nothing is more seductive then the calls of sexual vice. You've thoroughly captured the allure in this poem. The narrator knows of the wrong, but relishes it still. It makes the forbidden seem so appealing, almost necessary, almost righteous. I just have one question. When you say "We jumped into the abyss head first," is that describing a gangbang? Maybe it's just my wishful imagination. My favorite part is "In darkness we are free In darkness we love In darkness we hope we could stay." Another beautiful masterpiece, and it has just earned you a fan, so keep up the sexy.

Neurotically yours,
Mister Splitbrain

[Rose Black]

Thank you i'm so glad you like my poems =D

[Rose Black]

Thank you ... =D

[RAOrourke]

I really enjoyed your poem and felt the pace and imagery were great. The only thing I noticed was the first line "hear first" was it to say head first?
Crashing with desire and lust

No chains to hold us

No eyes to watch us

No judgment
Loved this part, such intimacy and feelings readers can relate to! Well done

[Pax]

there is a tinge of seductiveness in such dark pleasure, very nice write...deeply emotional!

[Rose Black]

Thanks Pax

[just Penny]

A powerful write full of deep emotion. I love the line "in darkness we are free". As someone who likes to write dark poetry too, I really enjoyed reading this. As to the author note, I hope you let your dark side out to play more often, as this piece is excellent :) Penny

[Rose Black]

Thanks Penny =D

[ron]

It would be great if we could share that side with the one we love.

[Rose Black]

yeah but there is o garantee that they will love us when we do show them our dark side...

[ron]

That's true. But if they do it would be beyond words. But we would have to be willing to explore theirs to.

[Rose Black]

Yeah so true... But explore someone else's dark side might be dowright scary ...

[Amber Weldon]

It makes me wonder if sometimes we let "morality" keep us from truly living. I love this! So well written!

[Rose Black]

So true... Thank you Amber

[ANM]

Sometimes you just have to let it happen... Well written!

[Rose Black]

Thank You :-)

[ANM]

You are welcome!

[Vidya Bacchus]

Sometimes I think we would all like to let our darkside take over as you say.Good can be a tad boring yes? This is a seductive piece.Fantasies are nice until reality intrudes :)

[Rose Black]

So true. Reality sucks sometimes...

[Vidya Bacchus]

Yes it does :)