Aquarius
A Poem by
Rose Black
The delta
Aquarius
In this
watery plane they meet
Fluid and
natural
She sweet
and wild
He salty
and immense
Now merge
into one
Kissed by
the sun they meet
So different
yet so equal
Under the watchful
eyes of the stars
Their body
intertwine
Twirling
splashing in trembling waves
Their
nature forgotten
They become
one
She
vanishes into him
He moves on
carrying her essence
Torrents
pull him back
For another
beach he leaves
For another
lover
For another
body of sweet wildness
And the
adventure of Aquarius begins again
© 2014 Rose Black
Author's Note
I wrote this while listening to this song really inpiring to me
http://youtu.be/7wg4BmWIjI8
Reviews
In these waves and torrents there is such a beautiful transcendence. I am an Aquarius, so your title caught my eye so quickly, and your poetry transformed into a fierce rush of deep, pure water in me. xo
Posted 10 Years Ago
The water bearer as I am Aquarious. I found this so intriging and beautiful. I love how you marry the salt to water. A brilliant piece! :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
The water bearer as I am Aquarious. I found this so intriging and beautiful. I love how you marry the salt to water. A brilliant piece! :)
10 Years Ago
Thank you =D
Very well written. Sounds like a playa of the ocean. Unique and creavtive.
Posted 10 Years Ago
Very well written. Sounds like a playa of the ocean. Unique and creavtive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you =D
10 Years Ago
You are welcome.
This is so beautiful, I love the title, it reminded me of another song called "Aquarius" by The 5th Demensions. =3
I also love Digital Daggers, their rockin'
Anywho, well done! ^^
Posted 10 Years Ago
This is so beautiful, I love the title, it reminded me of another song called "Aquarius" by The 5th Demensions. =3
I also love Digital Daggers, their rockin'
Anywho, well done! ^^
10 Years Ago
Thanks Kat =D
10 Years Ago
You're welcome. ^^
"She vanishes into him
He moves on carrying her essence"
Beautiful. This poem was everything.
Thank you for sharing :)
Posted 10 Years Ago
"She vanishes into him
He moves on carrying her essence"
Beautiful. This poem was everything.
Thank you for sharing :)
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10 Years Ago
Thank you Rose =D
Wow. Your words painted such a majestic image in my head. I loved the astronomical metaphors, and the description of the sex was so beautiful. Although, I think it would have been more accurate to say "He vanishes into her" instead of "She vanished into him." I love how as the poem progresses, the glorification of love and sex intensifies, yet it all disappears at the tragic end with the "Torrents pull[ing] him back." The tragedy just makes the poem even more amazing. This is truly quality writing. Never stop.
Neurotically yours,
Mister Splitbrain
Posted 10 Years Ago
Wow. Your words painted such a majestic image in my head. I loved the astronomical metaphors, and the description of the sex was so beautiful. Although, I think it would have been more accurate to say "He vanishes into her" instead of "She vanished into him." I love how as the poem progresses, the glorification of love and sex intensifies, yet it all disappears at the tragic end with the "Torrents pull[ing] him back." The tragedy just makes the poem even more amazing. This is truly quality writing. Never stop.
Neurotically yours,
Mister Splitbrain
10 Years Ago
Thank you for you're kind review =D
I am impressed, i rarely read poems but this one was really good! well done.
Posted 10 Years Ago
I am impressed, i rarely read poems but this one was really good! well done.
10 Years Ago
Thank you i'm flattered =D
10 Years Ago
:) really well done.. by the way i am an aquarius that's what attracted me to this poem.
This is romantically tragic. She has but one lover while he has many. Great poem I love how it flows and brings you to its end, and yet it begins again. Amazing.
Posted 10 Years Ago
This is romantically tragic. She has but one lover while he has many. Great poem I love how it flows and brings you to its end, and yet it begins again. Amazing.
10 Years Ago
Glad you liked it Ron =D
10 Years Ago
It was fantastic. I couldn't put the end on a poem like you did here I love it.
10 Years Ago
I'm really flattered thank you Ron
10 Years Ago
You are most welcome, and thank you for sharing.
I have read it a couple of times, already, still it is amusing, how a life of an aquarius begins again and again, always finding new love, seems like his nature gives a curse to him, now i wonder, very intriguing piece my friend...
Posted 10 Years Ago
I have read it a couple of times, already, still it is amusing, how a life of an aquarius begins again and again, always finding new love, seems like his nature gives a curse to him, now i wonder, very intriguing piece my friend...
10 Years Ago
Thank you Pax
10 Years Ago
always a pleasure my friend...
This poem reminds me of another one by another poetess....I like it very much. Nice imagery, and personification. Very nice write, Rose Black...
Posted 10 Years Ago
This poem reminds me of another one by another poetess....I like it very much. Nice imagery, and personification. Very nice write, Rose Black...
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