My Special Ghost

My special ghost,
You occupy my mind -
Thrashing
Twisting
At my sanity,
While you are unaware -
That my pieces are falling.

Dwelling,
You remain -
Untainted
Peaceful
Within this space
Between you and I -
And this thinning line.

Treasured,
I once was -
Blissful
Tears I've cried,
Because you taught me -
How to love
How to want to be with someone
By your side,
I wanted to stay -
Nestled within your scent.

My fading ghost,
You entered my life
So unsuspecting
So cruelly
You awakened within me,
A loneliness that remains -
Dreadfully,
Shattering my being into pieces.

Reviews

[SleeplessVolcano]

This one leaves a lot to the reader's imagination. One wonders what happened.....what was the cause of this trauma? You've weaved into a poem the drama normally associated with a short story :)

Great poetry.

[emipoemi]

I only have two things to say about this (six, if you count all the praise):

- some punctuation oddities, especially in the last stanza, make it hard to figure out how everything is linked.

- "Dwelling"? in what? how exactly? that's not clear, and also, it would be better to say "my special ghost" again (or a version of that), for it would guide the reader better into an understanding where you're going with that stanza. And the Stanza 3 can stay as is for variety.

Other than that (my four points of praise): This has brilliant flow, sublime power, and extraordinary construction! An absolute gem, if ever I've read one! I'm surprised no one has commented on this yet. Well freaking done!

[Angeliki Largatzis]

Thank you for your helpful and kind comment. 'Dwelling' is in the sense of being in my thoughts constantly, as the whole poem was written out as my intention to tell of a person that had hurt me emotionally.

[emipoemi]

though you may understand that as the poet, it doesn't really come clear as that to the reader, so it ends up being some "deadwood" word, which is why I made that suggestion.