My Headless Ghost

when i was just a little girl i had began to see certain things appear in my room. i usually ignored them but one night there was no ignoring this one ghost

 

i was having trouble sleeping this one night. i tried everything, drinking warm milk, taking a hot bath (mind you i'm only 10 years old). i begin to get a sickening feeling in the pit of my stomach and i run to my mom and dad's room. i was never so terrified as was that night. i knew i shouldn't wake up my parents but i couldn't help but feel terrified. my dad began to yell at me and told me to stop being a baby and go back to bed. i knew he wasn't being mean, just very tired, but i began to cry none the less. my mom asked me gently to go back to bed and go to sleep. i went back to my room and when i returned it was ice cold. i could see my breath and everything! i looked over at my bed and saw these red eyes staring back at me. when my eyes adjusted to the dark, i saw that the red eyes were attached to a head but the head wasn't on his shoulders! it's mouth began to move and all he said was hi and i screamed. i flicked on the lights as fast as i could, the moment i did he disappeared. i was breathing hard and i slept with the lights on that night. i never slept well that entire year.

Reviews

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This is a good start. I think you should place a little more description in it. I liked the plot idea. It is a good start to what could be a longer story.

[Natalie Lozano]

sounds like your talented to be able to see stuff like that. Is this supposed to be a short story? It reads like a diary entry or something like it. The experience sounds amazing and shocking but if you want it to stand out more it needs poetic words and more details. So we can feel your terror too. Not just hear and read it. Have u ever seen anymore? I have relative that sees ghosts too freaks her out so bad.

[Cassya77]

wow, weird, scary for a kid, but cool as an outsider to look in on.