On the Cusp

to my amazingly wonderful daughter

 

She is beautiful

inside and out

She is fierce

and loyal throughout

Knowing right from wrong

she'll never compromise

She's on the verge of something beautiful

right before my eyes.

She knows truth

from it she never strays

She knows her friends

those she never betrays

She cries

but holds tears close to her heart

Never on her sleeve

for those to tear apart

She is strong

She could stand against a gale

To uphold her values

those are not for sale.

Better watch it, if your kicking those who are down

better just hope that she is not around

She is beautiful

yet only just fourteen

She is beautiful

She could be a queen

The way she c***s her head 

and tells you how it is

Even when you don't want to hear it

especially from a kid

She pulls no punches

She only speaks the truth

Holds herself to her own standards

even in her youth

Womanhood just on the cusp.

She is beautiful

I want to be her when I grow up.

Author's Note

Can anyone tell me how to fix the problem with the picture and text. techie idiot here.

Reviews

[Tommy]

Oh, but she is who she is because of you. This is a sweet ode to your daughter. I think it flows very well, and has a message in it, which says, we can learn from anyone if we open our hearts to their wisdom. Your daughter sounds like a treasure, and I am sure she treasures you in the same likes.

Great Write!
RLG,
Tommy

[Jasmine]

the last line is stunning, a perfect end to a heart-warming poem. i'd love my mum to write something like this for me! Your daughter will love this.

[Adam :P]

nie flow

[Sarah Fletterich]

Very very nice poem by the way. you definately made me think about who this character could be. And at the end that was an amaing touch " I want to be her when i grow up". that was amazing. I really enjoyreading your writing it gives me a burst of joy that I really enjoy having. Please sent me some more requests. I hope what I told you about the picture thing kind of helped I was not quite sure on what you were looking for but I tried to help you out to the best of my ability. I hope to read more of your writing it is a joy.

[Sarah Fletterich]

The only thing that I can tell you is click underneath the picture next time and hit enter a couple times. But I am not sure where you are wanting it. were you wanting the text under on top or to the side? What I told you is for you to put the print on the bottom of the picture.

[trainwreck]

This is amazing. I'm beyond impressed.

[C.N.Moore]

This is just a purely beautiful write - a great tribute to a young woman who seems to have a strong mind on even stronger shoulders. Something to be proud of, having been a huge part of her character.

-S.C.Hahn

[Hannah]

WOW this is amazing. An unforgettable poem. This poem has a nice rhythm and flows easily. The use of repetion is effective. I love this poem and everything about it there is no negative comments that can be directed at this as I feel as if this poem is perfect.

[HappyOddGirl]

I love this! It makes me want to be her "when I grow up", too! :D And it makes me feel empowered - that I actually could achieve it. :) It's wonderful that you see your daughter that way. :)

I'm sorry I don't know how to fix the picture. My own method is to keep clicking things to see what they do, and generally mucking about with it till it looks the way I want it to! :D

[diannesam]

This is such a beautiful poem, You have such a strong passion and talent in writing, thank you for letting me read this.