You Cheated

Why can't you love me the way you should?
I know you could...
Instead my heartache is what your choosing...
It's me that you are loosing...
I hate what you've done to me,
I was all that you ever wanted me to be,
I'm not blind, I can see..
I see your game,
I'm not insane, you are hurting me...
After everything I have done for you,
everything I gave you, you turn around and cheat?
All the times and memories we have spent together you even said we'd be forever..
The bond we share,
I never thought you would dare,
dare to hurt me this way,
all the lies you say...
You made me sick,
she is what you want to pick...
You made me cry while you told a lie,
you made me want to die...
How could this be your not here with me?
You are not that man I thought you were,
now I know, now I'm sure..."Never hurt you",
is what you said,
now I know your not a man of your word...
Made me feel crazy when I asked "why your phone was off",
yet I knew you were hurting me,
I knew I was right, you were out of my sight,
you really ruined my life...
How could you ask me to forgive you?
How many times can I? You have lost my trust over what I call lust...
You chose to hurt me it was a must...
I am beautiful so I have to be brave,
brave enough to move on,
I will be strong, without you,
my life won't be wrong..
I will forget you in time,
and no, no it's not fine...
I'm glad that your not mine...
You use to be my greatest treasure but now your never...
I hope your happy for what you did to me,

Right now your blind but soon you will see.

Reviews

[Blue Moon Ice Cream]

It seems like this was written as a bit of a rant, which is definitely a relief for the author as they express their feelings--and this was full of emotion. The problem with the rant-like tone is that it comes across as unpolished. The rhymes seemed to muddle the poem because you had to craft each line to fit the rhyme, and it ended up feeling unnatural. Also, for a painful poem like this one, rhymes can take away some of the seriousness and make it feel more sing-songy. I know that it just feels good to let everything out in whatever way possible, though.

[Bewitching Sensations]

He doesn't deserve you babe.. just remember the good times and move on.. Thats the end of a chapter of your life.. The next one will be new and exciting.. you know love doesnt stop at the end of a relationship... love is like a river it flows on to the next person you are with.. more deeper and meaningful.. x x

[Clever Forever]

I love this. I can feel the pain, its very well written as well :)

[Erica Nichole]

This is amazing! I love how you put all this feeling into it. Good job

[TJ]

Such heartache and pain in this one that ascends into the message that you will move on and be free of this sadness!
Good work

[silentpoet]

(instead my heartache Is what you're choosing)... sad but beautiful and those words I know oh, so well and too felt when a heart breaks sometimes the ones we thought loved us the same are the ones that CHOSE to hurt us when In reality If they loved us would relieve us!!! beautiful poem full of emotion.

[Jasmine]

You portrayed the feelings of anger and dispair and lose well. It was awesome.

Great poem. The form says as much as the writing itself here. Excellent display of the feelings of loss and anger. Good job pushing through it

[Akshat♥]

awesome piece..i really liked it..
i am also going through this phase..
so i get the same idea of yours..
being strong is what we can do in this situation..
i hope you will definitely some one better than this..
keep writing!!!

[Dark Angel ~]

This is very nice. The anger is easily felt- especially thanks to the line running through it. This could be the anthem for so many women out there... Great job.