powerless

I surrender
To the look residing in your eyes
Judging all my words as being lies


I surrender
To the fear that lingers in my veins
Wrapping my soul in your chains


I surrender
To the cruelty beating in your heart
Tearing me inside, part by part


I surrender
To the grip you have around my neck
One movement, and my life is wrecked


I surrender
To the power you have over me
Knowing that you will never set me free


I surrender
To the gun you hold on my head
Triggering it, will send me to eternity bed

Reviews

[yashsickle]

Very dark but rhythmic, not quite sure how I feel after it. I loved the first two lines. "To the look residing in your eyes
Judging all my words as being lies"

[Yina]

Wow That's intense! I'm almost ready to surrender after reading that

[Brad]

damn, this was raw and powerful...feel like i got a brick in the face

[Kenneth The Poet]

Heavy. Very good.

Love the rhyme scheme, too.