velvet

the sensation of a first kiss...

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Vibrant tension between us

Sparkling eyes colliding

People around disappear

When you are near

Senses befogged by your aura

Your closeness is all I want

All I can think about

Your warmth, your arms around me

Is all I need

Suddenly your lips so close

Your heat I can feel on mine

Moment purely divine

Your beauty engulfs

In my closing eyes

Softly your lips touch mine

World vanishes into nothingness

Sparks, and heartbeat

I sense the warmth of your lips

Slowly retreat, my eyes won't open

My knees of jello

Heat burns like fire

With a new touch of your lips

Heart beats to jump out my chest

Wonderful sensation when your lips

Touch harder, asking for more

Willingly I welcome your breath into mine

Heat mingling

Tingling through my veins

Ecstasy of pure bliss

Shyly your tongue in search

Timidly caressing

Time and space melt into heaven

My fingers roam your neck

To your silky curls

Combing through their softness

While your tongue

Tenderly explores

And delicately pleases me

Your velvet plays around mine

Shows me carefully

Your hot intimacy

As I lay all the love

I feel into this

Wordless declaration ...

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Reviews

[Jazique]

Flawless in every way to when it comes to spelling & grammar. As for the writing all I can say is wow. That was wonderful and just over flowing with power of words of descriptions and all. You did a really excellent job with emotions of that moment in a good way. Keep up the marvelous writings.

[Krystal Nicole]

Very intense and powerful. Great piece

[Katannaism]

Wow this is a really intense poem! Love it-the slew of metaphors are very lovely written, the emotion and the raw energy put into this is also quite wonderful. This truly engulfed me-Thanks for sharing~ ;)

[The Most High Priest]

wow...what a feeling that must be.......

[Cynthia]

Great Work! I truly love this!

[Dalebear]

This is good, Great work

[cassandra violet]

this poem gives me faith for love. Though every line was beautiful my favorites were-
"My fingers roam your neck
To your silky curls
Combing through their softness
While your tongue
Tenderly explores
And delicately pleases me"
keep writing!

[Light]

Intense, vivid, wonderful!!! This is a very steamy and beautiful write. Well done. Bellisima!!!

[Sweets]

This is so good :)
Great work! :D

[Tina Kline]

Love this, wonderful intensity, the building up to the kiss, the actual event and then the wonder of it's fulfillment!