Hot Summer Night

Hot Summer Night

A Poem by Angel Bird
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Senryu

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---Sweat Glints On Hot Skin

---Teasing Lips And Fingertips

---Eyes.. Begging.. For Love..

© 2009 Angel Bird


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Talk about saying a lot in a few words! You do a great job of capturing desire and longing in this senryu. Wonderful imagery! Of course, I'd expected something a bit more nature-centric, but this was a pleasant surprise. Good choice using the ellipses at the end, too - it makes us hang on for a that extra second, increasing our sense of anticipation for the next words. Why did you choose to only use two dots in the ellipses, though? Why not the traditional three? It'd put more space between the words... :-)

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Love the title

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This poem sizzles! Great title to top it off.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Short and sweet!! i love it.. it was discriptive useing soo little words!! keep writing!!
hugs
alyssa

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yes.
That's all I can say. Mainly because I don't want to clog your review with how much I like it. So...
Yes.

Posted 15 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Love how you captured the desire and wanting in this short verse..

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A very sweet and passionate write in such few words... fantastic.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's so powerful, words that really stay with you. You've captured something in a way that no one else could've thought of-- I love it, and it isn't so lengthy that I could very well read it more than once.
Thank you for sharing!

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

awsome little poem, full of heat and lust. and you got the feel of the senryu just right well done

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i dont like it

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Excellent, the last line is amazing in it's complexity
the longing, 'begging' invokes so many scenarios such as a forbidden love or the other lover
Last line is magnificent, nicely done

J.P.O.et

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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