unreachable

out of inspiration. a kerchief moment

 

 

on her wedding day

his heart was breaking

not only in two

but into millions of pieces

and each and every broken piece

was numbing him with unbelievable pain

 

he had known this to become

the darkest day of his existence

it got even darker than dark

today his world stopped turning 

his sun got knocked off

 his whole being ripped in two

 

he looked at her in the distance

standing like an angel from heaven 

in a gleaming cloud of white  

on top of the big steps

at the cathedral's entry

never had he seen such innocent and pure beauty

 

he filled his lungs with a big gulp of fresh air

but it did not help

the terrible hurting inside

nothing could help

this evil spirit, sore thoughts

and all of those way too clear images

that constantly emerged

and which he couldn't get out of his reeling mind

 

that this  ... well ... handsome guy

was to touch 'his' precious love tonight ...

and it will be his  ' R i g h t ' to do so ...!!!  ...DAMN!!!

that guy there with those   b l u e   b l o o d   m a n n e r s !

was to be the father of her future princes and princesses

she was lost to him now - for good! - forever!

 

the just married couple

made its way through an

applauding, shouting, waving and singing crowd

he did not even notice nor realise it

he only saw the one person

who meant everything to him

the one he loved with every fibre of his being

coming nearer and nearer

her slender and fragile figure

on the arm of that ... m a n !

 

right then he caught

her furtive glance at him

and he saw a lonely tear

gliding down her lovely peachy cheek

 

they both knew

it was the end

of it all

the end

of the two of them

the end

of two

who were meant to be

.......... but could never be

 

even when his whole heart

was hers - forever

and hers was his - forever

 

W H Y ???

 

 

why had she

to be

 

the King's daughter

 

?!?!?

 

 

Reviews

[Arrinae]

Well done! It was a wonderous read, and attention grabbing too. I applaud your piece. It was far too easy to slip into the mind of the narrorator. The only thing, I feel was missing was the raging anger and of being forced to let another touch the one who holds his heart. The anguish and helpless feelings were easily portrayed. Truely a fine piece!

[Angel Bird]

Thank you very much for your kind review. Yes maybe his desperate anger could be a little bit more raging, but back then in those times they knew from the start that they had no future, but love knows nothing about rules and rational thinking. I appreciate your comment. Thank you.

It took a few moments to get going for me, but I found this piece most definately worth the read. It's very sad, but very touching; you've tapped into a very universal theme here. The start seems a little unclear, though; I loved "his heart was breaking / not only in two / but into millions of pieces", but the rest of the first third or so was a little confusing. But, as I said, it doesn't detract from what otherwise shapes up to be a wonderful piece =).

[TamiViolet]

Angel, this is my favorite of yours. You know... Sometimes we read that verse that kisses...
Star-crossed lovers... Their hearts will find a way... Whenever I read a piece that touches
me in a way I've never been touched... I can't seem to find the right words....

[Rain]

Pretty cool way you layed this piece out. I liked it. Oh, the pain of not being a blue blood. Nice work. Rain..

[Picture of Poetry]

Brilliant job! It has a great structure and flow with in it!

[vanishing]

Angel-I can say i loved this writing

Exceptional story telling
"the pity of a king's daughter
really capturing the classic
olde english feeling
and what it would be
to have love and lost"
taking the reader
to another place and time
beautiful! thanks for sharing

[Rosary]

WOW!!!!!!
love it such emotion such tension. it made me sad tho. over all you made a wonderful story.