unreachable

out of inspiration. a kerchief moment

 

 

on her wedding day

his heart was breaking

not only in two

but into millions of pieces

and each and every broken piece

was numbing him with unbelievable pain

 

he had known this to become

the darkest day of his existence

it got even darker than dark

today his world stopped turning 

his sun got knocked off

 his whole being ripped in two

 

he looked at her in the distance

standing like an angel from heaven 

in a gleaming cloud of white  

on top of the big steps

at the cathedral's entry

never had he seen such innocent and pure beauty

 

he filled his lungs with a big gulp of fresh air

but it did not help

the terrible hurting inside

nothing could help

this evil spirit, sore thoughts

and all of those way too clear images

that constantly emerged

and which he couldn't get out of his reeling mind

 

that this  ... well ... handsome guy

was to touch 'his' precious love tonight ...

and it will be his  ' R i g h t ' to do so ...!!!  ...DAMN!!!

that guy there with those   b l u e   b l o o d   m a n n e r s !

was to be the father of her future princes and princesses

she was lost to him now - for good! - forever!

 

the just married couple

made its way through an

applauding, shouting, waving and singing crowd

he did not even notice nor realise it

he only saw the one person

who meant everything to him

the one he loved with every fibre of his being

coming nearer and nearer

her slender and fragile figure

on the arm of that ... m a n !

 

right then he caught

her furtive glance at him

and he saw a lonely tear

gliding down her lovely peachy cheek

 

they both knew

it was the end

of it all

the end

of the two of them

the end

of two

who were meant to be

.......... but could never be

 

even when his whole heart

was hers - forever

and hers was his - forever

 

W H Y ???

 

 

why had she

to be

 

the King's daughter

 

?!?!?

 

 

Reviews

[Arrinae]

Well done! It was a wonderous read, and attention grabbing too. I applaud your piece. It was far too easy to slip into the mind of the narrorator. The only thing, I feel was missing was the raging anger and of being forced to let another touch the one who holds his heart. The anguish and helpless feelings were easily portrayed. Truely a fine piece!

[Angel Bird]

Thank you very much for your kind review. Yes maybe his desperate anger could be a little bit more raging, but back then in those times they knew from the start that they had no future, but love knows nothing about rules and rational thinking. I appreciate your comment. Thank you.

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hey i wanna cry now... beautiful imagery.. almost saw it all happen in front of me... saw him losing his love...saw her losing herself... and lost myself in their tale of ache...

[Rachel]

me likey. romance, problems, spiritous connections. It's all good.

[sk8tagirl95]

lovely

[Catastrophe]

I should say reading this poem got me confused, but that's
a good thing because it made me want to read on
and the fact that the font changed did not make it lose any specific feel, but
it had a greater impact on the stanza or line; for me.
It is really sad, i enjoy the fact that you wrote it in this way, unique style of yours
i like this poem; great work

[Laura E. Aranda]

awwww, I have a gigantic lump in my throat! This was so real and so sappily sad! Man, I LOVE POETRY LIKE THIS...it was an easy read, it kept my attention and ...well...it was just good! A plus for you! Cheers, lea

[Jay M. Jones]

This is great!

I love the twist ending. you did a great job of keeping us entertained until you zapped us with the end.

[Lying Is My Hobby]

Haha. The ending was amusing, but not very thought-provoking.
The title fits the story very well.
The poetic beginning was also very well done.

But the second half of the story...it looked like you just got lazy and stopped giving it your best.

[Emily Rose]

Aww this is so sad! It confused me at first, since I assumed that the groom was speaking (why would the groom be so upset about getting married?) but then I pieced it together and it made more sense... It's a story of deep pain and loss. How awful for the two lovers to be seperated by a simple birthright?

My only concern is that halfway down when you start adding extra punctuation and spacing out the letters it gives it a more juvenile and less serious feel, and I don't think that's what you're going for. You might want to look for some other way to emphasize the important words and phrases, because, at least for me, the interrobangs and spacing were a bit of a turn-off.

Well done though, you really capture the sadness and longing in this piece.

[Stacy]

Nicely done

[Fran Marie]

Royalty has its own price ~one cannot marry beneath their blue- blood status so it would seem~ tho~ their heart belongs to another~ a very well crafted piece which shows how dark and weary love can be~THanks for submitting to the contest~Fran Marie