hers

 

 

 

              Hair plays in the wind

               Her smile takes my breath away

              My heart ... is all hers!

 

Reviews

[Astrid Hamilton]

Haiku is a very delicate and difficult genre of poetry-
the brevity of words, tone, and application of some form of nature must
be interwoven so, and without restraint or strain.
You have perfected this-
love,
I believe,
is the most natural aspect of true nature.

...and I believe her heart is all yours too.

[alternative_be]

Short but powerful! True love at first sight!

[Jacqueline]

I learn something new everyday-this haiku (or senryu as Poeticpiers corrected) is ethereal and emotional at the same time. You make me feel the love you have.

[Barbara Walker]

And those feelings are well expressed in so few words, a difficult thing to do! This is very good! Barbara

[Poeticpiers]

nice effort but not a haiku.Haikus deal with nature.This is a senryu which deals with human feelings