hers

 

 

 

              Hair plays in the wind

               Her smile takes my breath away

              My heart ... is all hers!

 

Reviews

[Astrid Hamilton]

Haiku is a very delicate and difficult genre of poetry-
the brevity of words, tone, and application of some form of nature must
be interwoven so, and without restraint or strain.
You have perfected this-
love,
I believe,
is the most natural aspect of true nature.

...and I believe her heart is all yours too.

[Dalebear]

How lovely is this poem

[Brianna Brie]

O.k. so this poem has that sweet feel of being in love. Well said in a few words!

[Clarisse Nanoit]

I like this. :) It's a good first submission to my contest (Magic in Her Eyes). It doesn't say anything revolutionary by any means, but it states a feeling and it does so well. Nice work, and thanks for submitting. :)
KH

[Adela Muresan]

The first tow verses create a splendid image and they comunicate the adoration, but the last one...is a little to simple, and ''empty'' if you ask me.

Great write :) .

A.M.

[Jerbear The Great]

Short, Sweet, and to the Point. Good Job, nothing to critique, keep up the good work.

[Eyudo]

ok, i cant believe no ones poited this out to you, the haiku is great, but its not a haiku, the second line has 8 syllables instead of 7, so you know

[The Mad Prophet]

Ether a love one in the form of family, friend, or lover. Hard to tell, but thats why I like it. It leaves some mystery, makes it fun. Very well writen, very well expressed.

[SM Davis]

Another great Haiku. Her's, however, should be hers. (Just a side note). This is lovely, lilting and warm.

[Sarah]

This is beautiful & captures the simple love in just a few short lines! This takes a lot of talent, so great job! :)

[vanishing]

Angel
Haikus have a way of capturing portrait
imagery as well as emotion
in essence-this writing
captures the meaning perfectly
Romantic and Beautiful~