Puzzled

We are all made up of pieces, but have you ever wondered whether everything fits together perfectly?

If you find me sat in contemplation

Please track me during the separation

Because I don’t believe I’m one anymore

           I’m coming apart; up in the sky and down to the floor

 

                        The fragmented shards float

          Unconsciously

 Effortlessly

   Without direction

                                             Without connection

 

            A Neil Gaiman book

           The Californian air

Boston by Augustana

Writing with a pad and pen

Roast dinner on Sunday

                               The need to mend a broken heart

            The urge to get up and go

                       The hope to click once more

 

                                   

I am but one puzzle on the shelf to seize

           Yet I beg, won’t you solve me please?

Author's Note

The structure is meant to be spaced, but I don't think it's shown as clearly as it was in the word document when I wrote this.

Reviews

[freelancejouster]

there's something so lovely about this

[Silent_Whispers]

This is a brilliant poem! I love how you disconnected the lines to emphasise the "puzzle". It's very good well done!

[Leslie Philibert]

Unusual poem, fragmented and surreal.Good work.

[FocusedAmnesia]

I love the opening verse! Nice read

[Miss Marie Riorden.]

This reminds me, in all honesty, of a good friend of mine's structure when she writes. She likes to space the words to where they're not in the same alignment.
And the concept of us being puzzle pieces is only so well described. That's what we are. Scattered around and I think you pieced it (wow, >< corny pun.) together very well. I like the next to last stanza, and how it has several different things in it. You can kind of detect some confused imagery, in a good way, in this poem. Keep writing (:

-Marie-

[nostal]

Very clever and resonant ending

[stars are far]

the structured is nice ..
i loved this :)

[Joshua]

Amazing! Not only are the words well-chosen and organized, but I love the way that the lines are indented differently each time. It fits.

[Darkest Rose]

I loved reading this! The structure is amazing and as ever it flows well. Love reading your work as always. Keep up this awesome writing :)

[realmwriter]

Dude I really like this. It's introspective but not necaceraly in a bad light! Very cool!