Separate and Collapse

First one in a while and I apologise for that.

You’re like a greased rope above a trap hole

I can grab your attention

But soon I’ll slip into the abyss

 

I’m like a sturdy home built on quicksand

Temporary comfort

Yet nothing incessant or lasting

 

Imagine we’re wires of fine string

Cut short by blunt scissors

As we part into fraying nothings

 

We’ll pass each other

We’ll even still talk

But not like before

I can’t maintain us

 

I’m like a supernova out in space

Come in close from afar

Then fade to dark: a fond memory

Author's Note

Not a love story, but rather the inability to keep friendships staying as strong as they once were.

Reviews

[Seashell]

The fact that you think along these lines, proves you are a worthy being. Some friends drop you, for no reason and don't want to rekindle the friendship and others for different reasons, but are dubious/scared to make the first move to get things back as they were. No matter the reason, we must talk,talk and talk....iron it out..build it up..and start again where an even greater relationship should be formed only to last for ever. I say 'greater' as all the do's and don't's are amicably resolved enabling you both to reach a higher rung on the 'ladder of respect' for each other, to create a wonderful thing to enjoy. If it's rejected then it's their loss Andy !
You did real good here
Thanks for share
Babs x

[Pinkly Smooth]

I liked you metaphors, I could feel your words quite clearly.

[Steph K]

Sometimes you read something that touches your heart, making that click in your mind. My favourite line " Then fade to dark: a fond memory" Beautiful.

[Ruth]

Sad part of life knowing these things...but you verse this so well...I can feel the emotion within this poem love, great work xx

[Daisy Morgy]

i love how you put different meanings with different things like the rope and the falling was excellent!

[dreaming dame]

:) I think it's beautiful. And very well said. And agreed.

[realmwriter]

Bravo! This is my favorite of yours my friend. I oft have had the same trouble, and find that I have that problem now with a frienship! How does one rebuild what one did not know was broken? Excallent write!

[theopenbook]

yeah true:) friendships fade sometimes even when you hold on to them:) nice work i really liked the deep emotions:)

[Poe Redd]

I love this one! It's touching, and great fun to read. :)