The Monster

get's a talking to

You pathetic creature of the night
Why doth thou whisper thus
Lying there beneath my bed
Breathing in the dust
I know thou wants to eat my socks
But quietly if you must!

You shall not haunt my sleep tonight
For I'm a big boy now
If thou darest show thy face
You shall scrape and bow
I know thou wants to frighten me
The question is, just how!

Thou wretched piece of misery

Now hidden out of sight

Hearken thou unto me

You creature of the night!
I wants you to behave yourself
When I turn out this light.

Author's Note

Appreciate any feedback :)

Reviews

[Carol Cashes]

AAAHHH! Monsters under the bed! Eat your socks? This is imaginative and delightful despite the subject matter.

[Stan Lee]

Did you have a monster under your bed once? Thanks for the read and review. Glad you liked this little poem. :)

[Carol Cashes]

I currently have a platform bed with drawers - there is no under-the-bed. I will always have a platform bed, I lose enough socks in the laundry!

[Stan Lee]

Haha! Good plan! :)

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is really cute. I feel like my kid is going to come up with something like this when she is older. Much enjoyed :)

~Luna

[Stan Lee]

Thanks Luna :) Glad you enjoyed it!

[Jacob Clifford]

You tell 'em! This child seem like he's trying to brave and grown up. Good for him! I certainly never had the balls to speak to the monsters under my bed with such bravado. Very enjoyable poem. In the third line in the first stanza, "laying there" should be "lying there". Unless the rule was different in old-timey English?

[Stan Lee]

Nah, it's laying eggs. Just kidding :D Thanks for pointing that out. Will change asap. :) Thanks for reading and for your review. Glad you enjoyed it Clifford!

[WordShaker33]

Such a WONDERFUL poem! I can relate to this poem completely! I admire the rhythm, the flow, and the language of the poem. All very lovely!

[Stan Lee]

Thank you WordShaker :) I appreciate your kind and enthusiastic review.

[Shannon]

I love this! Some great scolding. There is some awkwardness in the second stanza for me, but that's just being picky. Adorable, but.... Some measure of seriousness, as well.

[Stan Lee]

Thanks S.Mi. I agree with you, the second stanza doesn't flow as well. It's basically a filler and I guess you can tell. Anyhow, thanks for reading and reviewing. Glad you loved it! :)

[Lorry]

Nice, I like the mix of humour and Olde English, makes it sound like a kid, trying to be a proper grown up big boy, while still having the kid inside, hiding under the covers. Hope he knows that the monsters can't get you if you sleep with your head under the covers...It's worked for me so far :)

[Stan Lee]

Thus and thus I thank thee. :) I'm glad you liked it Nemo.

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Hahaha. Reminds me of Monsters Inc!

Very well written! I am sucker for Elizabethan language in a poem and you do that very well here.

A very inventive poem, extremely well executed and flowing superbly. I didn't realise the monster under the bed ate socks, though! Makes me wonder why i washed mine all those years ago!

Very nice work!

[Stan Lee]

vive la revolution! Thank you Doodley!! I do appreciate your very kind and encouraging reviews. :) The language I tends to flow well so you can tell the harder bits to figure are where I start straying but I'm glad you found the poem enjoyable and inventive! My monster eats socks. One sock at a time so I only have odds. :P Thanks again Dooooooooodley!!!

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And damn! Nice picture! An excellent choice!