Bye Bye

Inspirations: Kirk, "Blackbird" - The Beatles, "The Cardturner" - Louis Sachar.

Bye bye Blackbird

You've gone now Blackbird, away you fly

Failing completely means failing to try

So leave behind the ones that cry

Bye bye Blackbird

Bye bye

 

Bye bye Blackbird

Behind an aching heart and teary cheek

The days flew by but there's no winning streak

No waiting time now, you may speak

Bye bye Blackbird

Bye bye

 

Bye bye Blackbird

Dead to the world that was never kind

You thought you could leave and no one would mind

If you don't seek you'll never find

She sings, Bye bye blackbird

Bye bye

 

 

Author's Note

Appreciate any feedback

Reviews

[mou]

WRITING STYLE WITH A REPETITION REMIND THE CHILDHOOD DAYS BUT THE INNER MEANING MAKE ME RETURN TO THIS PRACTICAL , CRUEL WORLD....

[Stan Lee]

Thanks for reading.

[Dalton Wagoner]

Nice. Like the rhyme scheme and the lesson behind the prose.

[Stan Lee]

Thanks Dalton. Glad you liked it. :)

[Willard Wells]

A lovely write and I, as you suggest with just the name, think "Beatles". I had a photo of a blackbird I took this summer and I wrote a piece to go with it, but it does not have any depth. Your piece has it all. Thanks,

[Stan Lee]

Wow, Thank you Willard. That's high praise indeed! I appreciate you taking the time to read and review. :)

[Akki]

Nice idea and poem too... I loved it...

[Stan Lee]

Hey thanks for reading Akki. I'm glad you loved it. :)

[Akki]

my pleasure...

[zunie frost]

Nice poems . I love this !!! Really lovely piece of work !! Great job

[Stan Lee]

Thank you Zunie. Glad you liked it. :)

[zunie frost]

Welcome !!! I did like it very much

[Carolynn]

This sounds similar to the Beatles song blackbird - very nicely written for a sad farewell

[Stan Lee]

Ah yes, it does mention in the comments that it (that song) was an inspiration. Thank you for reading and reviewing Cahar. Much appreciated. :)

[Dandelion]

This is beautifully written and very sad. Those that go "bye bye" are quite selfish. It's very hard on those they leave behind.

[Stan Lee]

It is very hard, especially when they promised to always be there... But times change and rearrange and one tries to be as patient and understanding as possible. Thanks so much for taking the time to read and review my poem.

[Dandelion]

You're welcome Andronicus.

[Robert Parlange]

Reading your poem reminded me of a Great White Egret I was observing the other day. Tall and elegant, it seemed oblivious to everything going on around it. It concentrated on a small drainage ditch as it walked along its bank, look for minnows and crawfish. There was almost a Zen quality about its concentration. I called out to it and asked, “How's fishing?” It looked at me with disdain. Foolish human.

Good work. If you make people think, you've succeeded as a poet.

[Stan Lee]

Thank you Robert. Very happy to hear that I've "succeeded as a poet" !! :)

[alifeacoustic]

A beautiful, sad and poignant farewell.

[Stan Lee]

Thank you. One day the blackbird might fly back, but if it doesn't, here's my farewell.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Poignant and eloquent piece!
The awaiting freedom and the vast sky for the black bird reminds me of how trapped we all feel sometimes.
Relatable and profound.
Loved it Andrea! :)

[Stan Lee]

Thanks Jyoti. Sometimes the ones who love us the most are the ones who are unknowingly binding us down. Thanks for reading and reviewing.

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Sadly true..
You are welcome. :)