Bye Bye

Inspirations: Kirk, "Blackbird" - The Beatles, "The Cardturner" - Louis Sachar.

Bye bye Blackbird

You've gone now Blackbird, away you fly

Failing completely means failing to try

So leave behind the ones that cry

Bye bye Blackbird

Bye bye

 

Bye bye Blackbird

Behind an aching heart and teary cheek

The days flew by but there's no winning streak

No waiting time now, you may speak

Bye bye Blackbird

Bye bye

 

Bye bye Blackbird

Dead to the world that was never kind

You thought you could leave and no one would mind

If you don't seek you'll never find

She sings, Bye bye blackbird

Bye bye

 

 

Author's Note

Appreciate any feedback

Reviews

[Sawdust]

I don't know about a blackbird but you certainly are a nigtangle

[Stan Lee]

Thanks Sawdust

[Shannon]

You totally deserve to win with this one. Sad resolve.

[Stan Lee]

Sad but resolute is right. Thanks for your kind review Shannon. :)

[Captain Rilen]

Reminds me of two Beatles songs, blackbird and cry baby cry. Though I say this, it's lovely in its originality. Lovely poem.

[Stan Lee]

*quickly googles cry baby cry* :)
You know what it reminds me of? ..yeah you probably do. I'm glad you like it. Even after all this time. It's a special one.


ps. are you wearing eyeliner in your prof pic

[Captain Rilen]

Yep, I most definitely am!

[Stan Lee]

Cute :) :)

[G. Coleman]

You have some really good lines in this poem. It's a piece you have to read once quickly for the smooth rhythm and reread super slowly to get everything the words communicate.

[Stan Lee]

Thank you G.Coleman, for reading, and for your insightful review. :) I appreciate you taking the time.

[Michael Stevens]

Hello, Blackbird, you sing quite well!

[Stan Lee]

Well thank you Michael :)

[Michael Stevens]

Quite welcome!

[Riddhi]

Hey!!!That is really a nice poem and i liked the deep moral behind this simple and beautiful poem...keep on writing and thanks for sharing...

[Stan Lee]

Thanks Riddhi! Appreciate you reading and reviewing. :)

[Érenn]

Been a while but I am finally here to read your piece and wow this is such a good piece. Lyrical to the bone, love the way it rhymes. At first thought the bye bye was jarring but then it just grew on me ^^. The structure is obviously well maintained. Loved the message you have portrayed here. Beautiful words, and they pack quite the punch. Thank you for sharing ^^

[Stan Lee]

Thanks for your interesting review Errenn. Happy that you liked it and that it "grew on you". This poem is quite a special one for me, you can probably tell. :) Thanks for reading.

[Relic]

This is great. There's so much rhythm and its consistent. Putting this into my favorites. Great poem.

[Stan Lee]

Aw, Thank you so much Relic. That's really kind of you. Glad you like it. :)

[Abhilash Hegde]

This so lyrical.. like a song, humming all the way.
I haven't listened to the 'blackbird' by beatles, but I just did now :)
These lines are so melancholic,
"Failing completely means failing to try
So leave behind the ones that cry"

- Beautiful and words just flow like breeze all through this poem.
It may be a farewell, or look-back or a tale of forlorn self..
All I can see vivid and stark in it is.. deep sense of losing something, that was priceless..

Thanks for sharing, Andronicus :)

[Stan Lee]

Did you hum it? ;) You're absolutely right in your interpretation. It is a farewell of sorts... more so, a fair-thee-well. Thank you for reading and leaving an insightful review. :)

[Emily]

I loved it!
The blackbird reminds me of Edgar Allan Poe's poem 'The Raven'.
Keep it up!!

[Stan Lee]

Thanks for reading and reviewing.