Abduction

o.O

I ascended.

Dust was gathering.

I could not yet

realize

what had just

happened

to my mind.

The stars,

cold and distant,

were the only

comforts of

assurance that

this alien

hemisphere

was my own.

Gliding heavenward,

tilted softly,

my gaze turned below,

where the fires and

blackness

of Earth

escaped

my sight

ever so slowly,

and the empty light

above engulfed

my entirety.

Letting in

the first

prodding 

trespasses

of beings

from beyond.

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

very creative write thank you for sharing it

[C.C. Marx]

Interesting read, nicely done, keep writing!!

[Rane Miller]

I can honestly say I have never ever enjoyed reading about aliens in any fashion. But this... this was good. My only "critique" is that you flat out use the word "alien". I know it isn't referring to the little green monsters specifically, but it would be better (IMO) to keep that one word out of the whole piece.

Also, if we're going to be technical (why not?), the third and fourth stanzas should be connected. You wrote this out in fragments of sentences, so to speak. The last stanza is not a sentence, it is a continuation of the last line of the previous stanza. Just something to consider possibly.

Nice job.

[Monster ^.^]

I really imagined being abducted. You are pretty calm there, probably a metaphor for something great :) well done :)

[Kelsey]

This is very interesting. It was fun to read and very nicely written.

[John]

Thank you. As opposed to my other projects, in this one I was trying for a "nicely written" comment.