Her Death

She wanders only to wonder,

if her tears will sprout flowers,

as she takes each step,

but never contains an ounce of power,

as her tears fall of acid,

and her weeping shudders her heart,

she struggles to breath,

as death shoots one powerful dart,

catching her limb by limb,

as she sways with the wind,

only to fall,

as her sight slowly dims,

and leaves with a whispher of powerful sins

Author's Note

Tell me honestly what you all think please (:

Reviews

[THWebb]

Nice play with words....very well written.

[Desmund Tiny]

this is great and it touched my soul........ amazing....... ^^,


~*~Des Tiny~*~

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This a very good poem.. I love the soft approach you took in the beginning.~"She wanders only to wonder, if her tears wil sprout flowers, as she takes each step"...it starts to pick up the tempo in the middle... then, ends with a whisper. Nice write!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Perfectly voiced and written, quirky and brilliantly punned, well done

[Tasha]

This was amazing.
♥ Ta'Shandra

[Shayla Sayer]

oh. my. darned. goodness!!
that was absolutely amazing. i loved it. i really did. amazing, but not only tht, heart wrenching----- no! soul touching! :) keep writing, sweet girl. i love you.

[stars are far]

this was so great :)