Solar Particle Eyes

It means too many things to describe. Its my soul on paper

Pairs of vaporizing and surmising lies

Purely expressive, arousing and subjectively nice

Teaching unassuming, wordy and supposable

Looking downward, a spiraling unknowable

Knowledge

Circumstantial celerity in retrospect

Distinguishing alkaline interconnecting

Lines

Vilonia heart strung emotions in me

 Atomistic theories break the falling

Harbored silica, crystalline dementia

 

Breathing

Musings replicate the way I differentiate

 

Anointed hands clasp dispirited

Sinner’s remorse, drifting dreamily blight

Darkness comes high, sinking not a bit

Breathing down my throat and soaking up my life

Drifting in machine simulated existence

Dial in the rain and push down all the paining

Pale and gray tainted resistance

A veneer of shining contempt

 

Reviews

[Alexandria Harris]

wow. deep very deep. I love the way that the rhythm flowed and the title definitely suits it well because to me, the word choices are "out there," but you connect it and bring it back, which is the point. thanks for sharing :)

[wolfshrew]

i like your word choice

[Lexi Nicole]

Very interesting. I love the imagery, as Greg said, it's very abstract. I like how you separated some of the words in the first stanza so that they held a bit more weight. You have talent, nice work!

-Howl

[Greg Skura]

Nice poem! Full of abstract imagery and wonderfully descriptive expressions! Thank You for sharing!