Alleviate

Philosophy allays you

A distortion of reality

A misunderstanding of love

Presumptuous words smite lovers

Bleeding from every place

You have cut

Every place that

Makes you vain

Presumptuous dialect ruins things

Caged in tempered glass

It still cuts my face

 

Reviews

[LivingHope.]

Wow, I really liked it! It's very different from anything that I have ever read. Keep up the good work! I can't wait to read more of your poems! -Stewie

[The Scanners See Sound]

While I really enjoyed the wordplay, and structure, and especially the imagery, I found the subject matter to be unfortunately subdued. Furthermore, the incredibly poetic and enjoyable imagery, somehow made what should have been a very passionate, scornful piece somewhat phlegmatic, stoic, and robotic.

I suppose it can be argued that the ascetic nature was the point, but if that were true, then that would make the piece just seem boring, I think.

[Clockwork]

Your words are so biting and to the point. I like like the contrasting elements in your writing. Your style is fresh and new.

[Last Lying Look]

This is a really neat piece too.
My mind is spinning.
"It still cuts my face."
That line really hit me.
I love it.
-Elissa