I meant for there to be multiple ways to take this entire poem. Also - each and every stanza will, can, and does - stand alone ...just so you know.But I prefer to take this work - my way, which is every way it can be taken - and all of them all at once.
"I Think I AM..."
"You":
that are so unique and special that "He" all but adores you -
in every way he can and could...
that "He" appreciates - as you are - in more ways than even you
will ever remember...
that share love and not just sex together
with heart and
soul and somehow -
somehow there is still more...
that shares life... and it isn't just existence
or space or breath or anything less than
e v e r y t h i n g you are!
"He":
that paused inside
the day "You" appeared and couldn't remember the
HOW to breathe -
as you continued by.
that wandered so far and wide crisscrossing each path and
twist and turn `til it WAS
"You" he spied -
the silhouette that blinded the pale sun that was hidden behind...
that heard the sound
that echoed the dreams one holds inside and just KNEW without a moment's
pause the tastes of always -
just because...
that "You" shouldn't have seen or ever noticed even being near
and yet you did, could, would and then ...smiled... "You" smiled!
... ...
and to me - quite simply I am "He" and you
are "You"
and to you - quite simply you are "He" and I am "You"
..and to us if ever we disagree
and need to remember which were we well, that's what tears are for... you see -
I like the depth and concerns expressed here. I agree with Poppy. Very multi-dimensional. So much to be gleaned from your words. "the silhouette that blinded the pale sun"..brilliant.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Joshua, you always surprise me with your presence, but it's the why that should interest you... you .. read moreJoshua, you always surprise me with your presence, but it's the why that should interest you... you see "things" I missed at your age - I was too busy ...surviving in my own way. I'm not great - good to adequate, yes. But YOU ...could be. Take care man.
Each unique and there will never be another you...both works...either way, yes...your writing is multi dimensional...and the final lines always, always...are a belter! xx
sometimes when two people find one another they just know they have seen the love of their lives and can't live another moment without the other person. their love blends them together and it doesn't matter who's he or you, the love and passion is the same between them. very interesting poem.
Some words are mere letters, others are the birth of thoughts and emotions, dreams and conversations meant to be overheard by .. Somehow you touch a place that few can, you trickle meaning, smiling, reminding, explaining, displaying and, finally, there's a long sigh, an intake of breath - and the knowledge that you are 'just me' .. and more.
'that heard the sound ~ that echoed the dreams ~ one holds inside ~ and just KNEW without a moment's ~ pause ~ the tastes of always - just because...'
what's even more wonderful than the process of thought, is the processing of the words; like a rose softly bent to accompany the wind, no affectation... just flowing naturally, gracefully, beautifully... A subtle rhyme that progressed more evidently in the last stanza just to give the right effect of a lyrical symphony of words... Brilliant Chris, loved it :)
What I enjoyed about this, Chris (no rhyme intended) - was the manner in which it builds, adds and progresses. The form, the movement of it keeps the attention so well. As for the subject matter...the interchange of the two subjects is quite lovely. My favourite line: 'that's what tears are for...' it's fresh and therefore welcome.
I feel like i am cheating, lol...like someone has already given me the clues to the essay under the desk...I do believe in spiritual soulmates, two who run along the edges of time at the same place, space and pace...those who never touch but always feel...total acceptance of and share in...each others presence, faults, highs, lows and dreams
Ah, the Marine, and the poet! Nice writing my friend. You've captured the essence of a soulful relationship, soulmates I suppose. Yet, as Captain states I can see an internal relationship in this also. You've been quiet lately, nice to see you're writing again.
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