"I Can't See Your Eyes..."

"I Can't See Your Eyes..."

We build sand castles all our lives
and wander life's waves
as they crash all around.

Each tower dissolves in the swirling ways
walls softly crumble...
windows fill, droplets fall
kingdoms melt into other days.

I still sit on the sea walls
- watching lives crash ashore
and 'tween each shimmering wave
you melt away and away
'til
I can't see your eyes
through the tears.

Chris

Author's Note

feel free

Reviews

[_mal]

Everything I've thought of this is already written in another review. This really knocked me around,

[Penlady]

...sadness is ever given, driven with the tides, the forelorn, relentless reaching for the shore, you've touched the very core of lost.....

[Amy Bumpas]

This is beautiful, mellowing...yet, sad

[J Todd Underhill]

Free to do what? enjoy? critique? read repeatedly? I am free because I get to read the wonderful works you create, I am free because I can write what I want still (who knows how long that will last?) I am free because I get to socialize with great writers such as yourself!

[Teri B]

Losing hold of someone, of the bond between your spirits...it's a truly dreadful feeling! And the feeling of helplessness that accompanies that loss is incredible!

[Emily B]

you amaze me

[Hayley]

Great job of keeping the theme and the sea alive in this piece.
It rolls with emotion, on and on...

[Rene Velez]

absolutely beautiful...

[Crowley]

The images so concrete and filled with emotion.....its hard to tell the tears form the ocean water, but we know...we know.

[J. J. Nightingale]

This sounds lonely .. and it seems those sand castles are leaving us.. and taking with them the sweet memories .. and tears come because we WANT to remember .. want to see those eyes .. and feel that love for always ..

Just my thoughts ..
Touching, as always Chris .. Jazz