"I Can't See Your Eyes..."

"I Can't See Your Eyes..."

We build sand castles all our lives
and wander life's waves
as they crash all around.

Each tower dissolves in the swirling ways
walls softly crumble...
windows fill, droplets fall
kingdoms melt into other days.

I still sit on the sea walls
- watching lives crash ashore
and 'tween each shimmering wave
you melt away and away
'til
I can't see your eyes
through the tears.

Chris

Author's Note

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Reviews

[TawnyBlueStar]

lovely imagery :D such a sweet poem
love it :)

btw thanks for the review :D

[Dragonflyz]

wow..beautiful!

[Christy Sargent]

This piece takes me back to the jetty along the Oregon coast...the waves splashing and sea foam clinging to the hard, black, cold rock alongside the starfish. A lady who was a stranger to me warned me, as I walked on the beach, to never turn my back to the sea. Nice reminder. Thanks. C.

[Buddhistboy73]

loved this piece....it is one of those poems that grabbed me, and said hold on, this has something to say.....love the imagery here...powerful stuff...and the final lines were just what I was hoping to read...look forward to reading more of your work...

[just rose.]

walls softly crumble...
windows fill, droplets fall
kingdoms melt into other days.

these are gorgeous lines. I feel like they're the start of a collection.

[Juliet]

I really enjoy nearly everything about this poem. It's touching and brilliant. So many great things I could say here. Fantastic piece and definitely one of my favorites. Shelving immediately.

[K.C. Zbryk]

This picture that you paint is amazingly clear and i can almost see you sitting an a wall watching the ocean. I loved the line about watching lives crash ashore. it's a brilliant analogy, and a perfect reflection of mankind. Beautiful, bittersweet, and amazing.

[?]

Chris,
Another beautiful piece, amazing, softly spoken, and yet sad.
Very touching words and thoughts
Love it

[Judas Hammer]

Pretty piece......love the soft temp

[sushi]

I could relate it to many incidences,
The times of disaster like the tsunami,
The time when our wish is not fulfilled and disappoints, when the heart breaks and so on....

The thing close to heart is lost, the tears flow heavy and the mind feel bad to accept the fact that the thing it desired is lost for ever... Still the fact has to be accepted, its no more ours and we gonna never ever have it or see it again...


It was touching....