"Once Upon A Time..."

Catch a breath

“Once Upon A Time…”

 

There was this dream…

 

The kind many wish they had

they held

or lived

or survived

or remembered in their night(s) mares.

 

A simple lil thing.

A momentary thing.

A caught within - ‘tween two breaths instant,

A thousand yard stare

…fixed…

 just behind your eyes -

Gazing into…

that bin holding all the life-shattered glass

Menagerie you ever treasured…

Yeah, that ONE!...right there…

 

And god I cried.

 

Chris

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Paul]

This is a great subject for me, as I find myself getting older with pressing priorities breathing down my neck. Sure, I'm middle aged, but I do have dreams. They pretty much stay stifled, as I don't think about them, so seeing your work here is a good reminder. Why didn't I at least dream a little? Neat poem! Granted, I'll never understand it the way you do.

[Aradhana]

A moment in life where u feel like what to do and what not to where everything comes in just in a second and then fades away and again comes back in our memories.....where we cry the tears of happiness and she'd the burden carrying for decades... A great mixture of emotions!!

[Chris]

Hi, welcome to my world. Won't you come on in?

Chris

[Aradhana]

I will definitely!! It would be my pleasure sir!! ☺️☺️

[duff]

Peeling back the lense allows visions beyond average comprehension. I feel like I'm free-falling into the anxiety before the trip starts. Man, I like it. A most enjoyable read.

[Chris]

Welcome and thanks for pausing... come by anytime and always speak your mind. Chris

[Wicahpi]

Treasured or not, it's poignant ..

[Chris]

I found it to be quite ...true.

[Fran Marie]

I love the emotion
within this lovely
piece ..a potpourri
mixture of intense
feelings come
flooding through

And god I cried!
sums it all up so
nicely..

well done..

[Stephany]

Dreams are they the path to tomorrow or the shadows of yesterday? A little of both, if we are honest.

[emmajoy]

' And god I cried.'

And thinking back, looking back into.. the tears still fall .. ..

There is that one special second when you want to gasp, weep, laugh, thank the all around.. because it give an unexpected feeling of YES! It's something inexplicable, it's something mystical and more.. can never be repeated.. and - never will fade. Perhaps?

You made me think back.. and, I did. Thank you so very much.

[Chris]

sometimes the "back" IS all we have, isn't it...

[emmajoy]

It is, and, so much happier, calmer, more beautiful than whatever other decade or.. The past has much to answer for and reply: 'Thank you for the.. .. ' Take care, Chris, keep safe.. friends are precious.

[DustyPegasus]

I liked how you used lil, bin, 'tween, to get the attention back. The images wasn't that much guiding, but I remembered such dreams of mine.
Opening was perfect. And I liked that 'th' and 't' alliteration, including that short 'thin'. You were building up nicely, but the reveal wasn't exploring a lot, I could use the writer to guide me more.