This is the best that I've ever seen "little nothings" exemplified. Normally I'm not into the "little nothings" part of human relationship (I go for the big splash), but your poem is a rare vivid glimpse into how it might feel without this message tipping over into kitschy or corny. Your halting wordplay makes those "little nothings" truly seem as precious as they really do feel when they happen like magic between two people. You've done a great job of SHOW-instead-of-tell on this (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Sometimes I forget to remember how to breathe... ya know?
I was there once, way back in 1981, July 4th ... dare I remember ...
So real. Thoroughly.
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Tis ...thoroughly... real. Careful, I've 40-ish pages of thoughts here. A small portion of my thou.. read moreTis ...thoroughly... real. Careful, I've 40-ish pages of thoughts here. A small portion of my thoughts but a fair portion to wander within.
4 Years Ago
and so the read goes on ... i just finish the pandemic piece.
You have been reminiscing.
Lovely thoughts
Time is so fleeting, do we ever appreciate the real moment. Or are we always rushing headlong to meet the next, that we miss so many entirely
Yayy this is a wonderful poem where you in fab stylish way as onlooker or participant describe a romantic relationship, the ending stanzas were ESP awesome and charming, yet the entire poem uniquely touching on the feelings, the sweet nothings and all. Kudos again!
I think the eyes tell so much...love, lust, want, need, comfort, joy, sorrow, no matter the words...
but right now all we have are our words to tell what the eyes might be saying if they could get close enough.
j.
"Life is a terminal disease." All the doctors have basically told me so.
"Life is an adventure... Pain, well you deal. Thanks for being here. 06/21/2020
I'm back and working on. I've been.. more..