"17 Syllables..."

Two-for-one

"17 Syllables..."

I think it's the eyes

that give it away - yes, ...yes,

it is in the eyes.

Flecks and swirls ...that glow...

the way I couldn't breathe ...move...

and then ...gawd, she smiled.

Ever find your rainbow?

...right then ...right there... just like that!

Living, breathing ...light...

...and then... the eyes... pass.

They weren't looking for ...at... you ...

THAT look ...look...swept...past.

I tasted midnight

and the salt sea spray ...again,

and empty moonlight.

Dreams catch up with you

long, long after you let go

...and hurt just as much.

Chris

Author's Note

Feel free

two for one - remember? The italicized stands alone as the now... the other four were the "then" - and the six together make a statement... and yet each senryu speaks for itself.

Reviews

[New Theory]

Your poems do express so beautifully, I enjoyed reading this, the fleeting moment that passed by when she looked at me.

[Coyote Poetry]

Amazing use of words and thoughts. The amazing words dance on the page. This would be amazing verbal poetry. The word strong and alive. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[Chris]

You should speak with JT Underhill. He has an Open Mic Poetry Program on weekly for us call in and read aloud poets...

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for sharing this. Splendid.

[Chris]

Senyru CAN inter-relate and still stand alone. Also, it is the thoughts being expressed that seem to determine the timing and order - until - you find those same thoughts morphing as you release them.

[Mollie Fitzner]

Great write and great and interesting formula and I really know what you are talking about--the last two verses really awakened me!

[Chris]

It was nice of you to pause with me...hope you return.

[Mollie Fitzner]

Are we friends on WCO? Sorry but I have a horrible memory!

[Mollie Fitzner]

Hmmm why did U get a red flag? And you got one too. I still do not understand all of the ins and outs of this site!

[Chris]

the flag is so you CAN select it to highlight a problem...its presence doesn't MEAN that there is a prob.

[Mollie Fitzner]

OK my bad Guess I am still figuring it out. How is it that you can stay on all day on a Friday? Are you retired? I have been on here almost all morning. Think I may have told you that my principal put me as a sub for my own lab today (hard to explain) so I get to watch the kids work and tell them to be quiet lol

[Kenneth The Poet]

You should try the square experiment...make it 289. I have achieved it and I see you doing it too...

It's like your standing on the Outer Banks in the middle of a moonlit night. I think you accomplished your aim here...to make us imagine, sir.

[Michael Stevens]

Even though you have heard this many times, you, sir, are a fabulous poet; this was excellent!

[Holly Mason]

Those eyes were lost in thought
They will forever miss the glimpse they didn't know was there
Syllables ..another pause another moment
Hello my wonderful friend
Thank you for sharing

[Chris]

I miss your voice... The girls ok?

[Shirlena]

She or rather her eyes worked their magic on the character didn't they and I enjoyed the ride along with the vivid description she left upon your minds eyes. The appearance of her eyes braced upon your tongue a marvelous diamond stutter, translating the effects through you pen. Really marvelous.

[Mary]

You're one who never disappoints. Thank you for publishing this here.

Sometimes when one petrify, the other move, it's the law of gravity somehow... ;) the then, and the now... winking there. Me is chuckling here Chris. All out of good heart, because you are a rich mind, and always fuel on what was, and power it to what "is". Oh and then that change, perfect, as only one true feeler can bring such.... I do miss your ink, always. And I try to be here as often as I can sweet friend. Another breathtaking one.

- Elisa