"Foolish Moths..."

I visited Ed Hart's pages...

 

I was visiting Ed Hart's pages today... His "Fire" -

 

http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/edhart7/1155531/

led to my thoughts flowing into this:

 

 

"Foolish Moths..."

 

It's Spring

and mirrors lie

and eyes still see

    and the mind ...understands

 

Fingertips waver and sway

     remembering

     wishing, wanting to seek

...wanting to be...

alive -- burned -- to feel Heart's FIRE

flowing each ...tip

dancing in the springtide

- days and satinsilk nights.

 

Heat

- and the frantic whispers --

drawing each close and closer still

the turnings, flowings

beings - becomings

 

     touch and so touched...

 

Wanted ...wanting ...

wished ...wishing...

...so missed.

 

Light reflects so softly

from faces watching their stars

     watching the clouds floating away

     watching the waves thunder ashore

     watching hands just begging to be given a Rose...

     watching eyes slowly filling

     watching everyone passing by...

 

breathing the fragrance of each breaths' pause

    tasting the essence of a smile

gazing within then through every perception

...and quietly letting go.

 

I wonder if my wings would have been...

 

Chris.

 

Author's Note

feel free

Reviews

[Writer #00]

Moths do venture near the light. A great analogy, yet somehow sad...

I can see how "Fire" led to this poem...it's like the same poem from a different perspective...and a lot of your own unique poetic touch.

zap/100

[Chris]

a year from now peeps will argue where something came from - the why and what influenced... and most times they assign their own perceptions... this left no wriggle room.

[Writer #00]

yep

[Ees]

In simply reading the title it made me think of the song "Moth" by moe. I don't know if you dig the jam band thing or not, but you should at least look up the words to "moth" it's a great song and I think you'd get it. anyway.... onto your poem...

It's a wonderful dancing poem that seems like life itself. I enjoy the choices that you made in this, the repetition and the ending. Many would not have had the restraint to end it where you needed to and you did.

great work!

[Chris]

The version on "No Doy" was good. - all about the living as ONLY we can.
Music is poetry in tones

I'm glad you paused.

[Eve]

ditto what Emily said, not much chance at all :)

[sharonlee]

Exquisite flow of thoughts Chris, with imagery that stirs the spirit. My own thoughts flow upon reading this, through past days and in & out of years.

[J. J. Nightingale]

I wonder what letting go, feels like
I wonder if fire is worth dying for
I wonder if anyone else wonders
How it will feel to finally fly ..


I like the way you find life, anywhere ...

Jazz

I'm cold, and I don't know how to be warm without..

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

It is better to make a mistake then live with regret... this life will burn us many times over but it will also bring us many cool moments.

Excellent poem.

[Chris]

glad you paused...

[Baby Ricochet]

zI liked the stanza with all the watching. Good one

[Robin]

all them W words - want wish watch wait - surrounding that very special one - Will .

[olla]

mine are still a bit singed

[Emily B]

the young bucks don't have much of a chance with you and ed around :)