"Seems..."

Elisa Laura's "Winter Valley" - I've lived the pic she put with the poem.

 

 

"Seems..."

 

Memories of time's grace

paths and ways

each ...place - but a breadth away

 

a foot's fall

a step's pace -

an arm, a memory's reach

and still more and yet near

to the taste of breathing while

gazing to the distance 'tween

...heartbeats.

 

And there IS wind

and it whistles clear and close

each cry a soft lullaby

and finds each space -

each nook

each pause I took

'til it bites with

tenderness and care

and caresses my heart

with its heat and need...

being there.

The taste of being

we

felt and held with

barbs touch - paused

within

by faerie ...and me.

 

Chris

Author's Note

Elisa Laura's "Winter Valley" - I've lived the pic she put with that poem. While looking at that pic, I wrote this one, Feel free to comment as you will.

Reviews

[Geon Quuin]

I'm somewhat mystified by this. The structure is obviously free verse, which I loathe, but the diction makes up for it. Although I'm quite lost with the actual meaning, I feel like I understood it in a sense other than literal. Quite an exquisite write.

[Chris]

Welcome to my thoughts... might I suggest you read it aloud - several times - to give the words full tone, and remember pauses...

[Belator Books]

*applause* For some, poetry is not complete unless uttered.

[J. J. Nightingale]

For me ... I loathe loathing .... Free verse is well named .. we are free to express our thoughts in a true and untethered tone ..

I do agree.... with Jazz :-)

[J. J. Nightingale]

:)...........

[Indie Skreet]

I did not consider myself to be a great one for romantic reads, but you have added that air to this and it is beautiful. My favourite line, Each place but a breadth away ... exactly how I feel.

[Ruth]

Your work touches me...my very soul...
Like a crystal blue ocean, refined and beautiful xox

[Dalia]

Your style of writing is special and attractive actually
Love to read more for you

[Tate Morgan]

Ever notice how two people in love seem to have hearts that beat in tune?

[sharonlee]

Thank you

[Chris]

Shar,

It's good seeing you... things well at "Apollo"?

[sharonlee]

Things are slow all round for me, thank you for asking my dear.

[Chris]

sometimes I wonder if we have to lasso readers and pull them to us...chuckling here

[sharonlee]

I grew weary of that... writing has become something I no longer have confidence in. But I do miss you and your thoughts... which is why I quietly pause from time to time.

[Chris]

aww Shar... you are one of the best writers... and you touch me deeply. Don't let others' silly silences get you down!

[Chris]

we write because we can... though I admit I like to be heard but I have and WILL write regardless of an audience.

[sharonlee]

I hear you, but it my muse, if such a thing exists, that is silent. I post little on Apollo and nothing in recent weeks that gives me that satisfied sigh. I hope you are well dear.

[Chris]

I haven't had a problem with needing thoughts to write...for me its been more of not wanting to write them down for others to hear.

[Chris]

strange how life goes isn't it?

[-----]

Fantasy and reality entwined? Nice writing, Chris :)

[Chris]

It was nice of you to pause Leona...

[-----]

It was a very pleasant pause, Chris. I look forward to reading you - more

[Larry Dyson]

love the last stanza for its phrasing mostly..good one Chris!

[Chris]

Laury, great avatar... good having you here - got coffee?

[Yellowjon]

A touch solipsistic but good control of the rhythm and original use of language in some places

[Chris]

I am a fair bit egocentric - when inspiration has me thinking... helps with the focus. I'm glad you paused.

[Yellowjon]

At least your honest about it. Most people would deny that they are at the center of their thinking, me included.

[Chris]

...and I am honest about the "glad you paused"

[Yellowjon]

I'm glad I paused too.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

Touching!
Tis is ....
What it seemed to me...as it came flowing by in its scarlet fury...
the agony of a memory ...to live and be lived again...
Seems a good title and rare..to name this Seems!

[Chris]

Its been awhile since seeing you last... I'm glad you paused today...

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

I am a regular this week in here kind sir...lets see how long i am made welcome...:)
I hope you are having a great 2013...And i haven't forgotten you!

[Chris]

YOU are always welcome with me... and I remember you too - music man.

[poetry-kiddo alienbaba]

I am