"Evening Steps..."

 

"Evening Steps..."

Think of our silhouettes against the sun...

and the lengthening shadows.

 

 

A hell-of-a-pair

walking/shuffling the berm,

edges, barest tracks of existence...

 

I can 'see' the thoughts

as they flow...

 

...sense the steps

the movings...

 

the 'feel' of the jeans

as I stride, the boots -

soles molding to the uneven surface -

the way the shirt rustles -

the pressure of the backpack,

the hanging straps of the 'possibles' bag

as it drapes my shoulder.

 

The sure tap-tapping of the walking stick...

finding its way.  Finding My ways...

finding tomorrows, yesterdays, nevermores -

silly-lost-me's fallen by the way-sides-

paths to be forgotten as neverweres.

 

I feel the comfort of the leather strips

I made and put in place as its grasp...

the maple shaft - its temper and the smoothness.
The solid "Tunk" as it seats in the fallow grit,

the feel of each footfall as I move along.

 

 

I'm still warbling it in my mind...

tasting the flow

feeling each ...ache

as the eyes water a bit

with each glance

...each step

...each bit of us left behind

...each breath taken

- every breath held...

the sound of the wind

the 'feel' of sunset.

And in the shimmer at the edges of my world
I know you're there...

right ... there
moving beside me,

our paths separate yet shared -

our footfalls mingled

the timings a sweet smile,

pauses - our breaths held as

magyk shares what we always knew

...echoes of we - fading in our -

distance.

Chris

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Bewitching Sensations]

Speechless..felt as if i was there beside you.. walking hand in hand..very surreal :)

[Belinda]

I love this, how you can capture the beauty of something so normal. A walk in the park. People don't do it enough. It really is something that people take for granted. Natures beauty at work, and noticed.

[Chris]

Writing is what we do... I think your Mallory would have smiled AFTER she got past the tireds and the Nature of e v e r y t h i n g. Perhaps she would have spoken out loud... or found her heart in her eyes and what she shared. Ya never know about teens, they always manage to "see" the world through their eyes.

[Belinda]

I agree. Thank you for this. I am glad you see Mallory like I do. To really "see" the world is amazing.

[Kenneth The Poet]

Brilliant. A real walk in the park...the state park...full of nature.

[Southern Cross]

I could feel the "walk", the strides, the thoughts along the way as I too shift my backpack from it's weight and continue to prod forward into the path of life leaving that part of us behind and yet propelling in the future with each step. "And in the shimmer at the edges of my world
I know you're there...
right ... there
moving beside me,
our paths separate yet shared -" Loved these lines and could so relate to them. Yet another beautiful thought provoking piece, Chris thank you.

[Rhianne Ney]

this is my first review on thy poem... this work is really admirable and there's really you in this...
I took your advice... and for the road you asked me to take...
Thanks a lot, Chris!

[Chris]

Hi Rhi! Thanks for pausing and for the thoughts. I look forward to seeing where your path takes you!

[Rhianne Ney]

I am really grateful for your help... (:

[Michael G.]

Felt and still feel this walk.

I started to say "incredible" work. Then, realized this is the norm when it comes to your work.

[Chris]

Chuckling here... Flattery gets you a second mug of coffee. But earning a sweet roll!! THAT will take going to an entire new level!

Good to see you Mike, how's your Sunday so far?

[Michael G.]

I remember sweet rolls. And caramel rolls with pecans. Great memories. These days, I'll settle for that good strong cup of your coffee. And that is a prize all by itself.

[Chris]

Nah Mike... the real prize is our sharing this moment just because we can... "It's pretty bad when all you can afford is to 'remember' the tastes of things you used to have and do..." and I'm not necessarily speaking of money - though for some THAT is also part of the equation.

[Michael G.]

Mine is more in the area of "Can't have" anymore. (Diabetic) But, yeah, I enjoy the moments because of the we can. So, I'll remember "fondly" work harder to stay in shape, and keep my leg with me.

[TL Boehm]

And in the shimmer at the edges of my world
I know you're there...
right ... there
moving beside me,
our paths separate yet shared -
our footfalls mingled
the timings a sweet smile,
pauses - our breaths held as
magyk shares what we always knew
...echoes of we - fading in our -
distance.

exquisite moment captured. Love that verse.

[Chris]

I'm glad you paused with me...

[Katherine Enma Pineappl..]

It took me a while to review because it really is addicting to read. Now I feel like writing :)

It's rare to see me speechless about a poem so well done. Your writing style is amazing and pardon cliche but your first lines really are beautiful

Please keep writing

[Chris]

Its never a cliche - when its meant... only when its used. I hope you find the heart within you to touch your stars. And come by and pause anytime.

[lee von cleef]

I love when a poem builds a boat, surrounds me within its shell,pollinating my emotions,
painting me into places I've already been, sharing, giving , "....echos of we -" setting me free to weep in company,

[Chris]

Glad you paused... company is sometimes hard to come by.

[lee von cleef]

soap and ice two, self cleaning

[Pi Cee]

This is absolutely beautiful. It swept me away...