Ode to the dragon

Ode to the dragon

A Poem by Anata

Belched from the volcano

Eyes red as blood

A scaly skin so soft

You can cut your wrist with it

 

Gained its power

From the eruption of Santori

Fascination of many

Pictured at the feet of Marduk

 

This powerful creature

Carries fear along its path

Yet its only desire

Is to protect the treasure

Never to be found by men

 

Living beyond its usefulness

It feeds on teenage virgins

Not a single spear can pierce its harness

A monster of stone

Creating with destruction

 

A symbol

Transcended centuries

Holding the treasure of lust

Keeping the secret of creation

 

© 2008 Anata


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Wow, this is one of the more original dragon pieces I've seen in awhile, fantastic! I don't know why but I really liked this part:A scaly skin so soft
You can cut your wrist with it

Posted 17 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You had me with Dragons. I must admit i love dragons with a passion. If only there were good dragon movies. Dragonheart was good but didnt like Eragon and Reign Of Fire promised way more than it delivered.

The ode was good and summed up the mythologies of european dragons very well. I liked it, your wording and the style. I noticed a few typos. So, if i may, i would like to point them out.

This powerful creature
Carry�s fear along it�s path - should be: Carries fear along its path
Yet it�s only desire - yet its only desire.
Is to protect the treasure
Never to be found by men

Living beyond it�s usefulness - living beyond its usefulness.
It feeds on teenage virgins
Not a single spear can pierce it�s harness - pierce its harness.
A monster of stone
Creating with destruction - created with destruction? - i think creating with destruction is ok if the dragon is the one creating things.

About its. It wasnt till i got to uni that someone set me straight. i messed up its a lot. It's as you use it is short for "it is". But, you are using posessive its which has no apostrophe. Complicated i know but its is the same as mine or yours or kevin's.

Great poem and a good introduction to your stuff.

Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Hey this is for you ...

The Stone

Streets got crazy, and steered up steams from the sewers
Something that was there urged the force of Revelation
The miracle makers of Dawn came to meet their descendants
Dressed in black and red gowns, moving like serpents
Caressing the doctrines and the dogmas you appealed
Made their way to the dominion of Man with a burning sword

Can you see their eyes blazing?
Can you feel their searing breath?
Can you see their wings and fearsome feral spikes constraining your soul?
Don it in domes of fire returning you where you ought to be
Entombed on the grounds you disgraced

And in terror the infuriated being,
Broke the chains of eternity
And they came to live and die
Among us

What do you have to say now for the power of the raging Nature?

Say, I was not suppose to be their blunt witness

Do you consign Nature Human?

God! I was the sinner;
Being the Leader of them all
Burned by your lava
You were the Volcano

The Ancient Dragon Lord

And now I am nothing; but a Stone�

By Chalkios

Kypros
xxx


Posted 17 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I have seen the real thing slobbering deadly poison and stalking prey of goats and sheep with a whiplash tail and steel trap jaws. The island of Komodo has the real deal. It's a risk just to see one! Great write on the mythical item though!

Posted 17 Years Ago


3 of 3 people found this review constructive.

Love this Dragon stuff.Loved the way it flowed thru the life of a mythical .Cool endin.
A symbol
Transcended centuries
Holding the treasure of lust
Keeping the secret of creation

Too cool..

Posted 17 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Okay, I'm a sucker for dragons! I simply love them and can relate to the secrets that they must contain. Great description of the dragon itself and the power that they weild!

Posted 17 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

absolutly beautiful... very well described and a wonderful tone you have set for others. well done!

Posted 17 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.


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Anata
Anata

Houthalen, Belgium



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