Rain

The rain tumbled from the sky.
I trembled in my bed.

Drip
Drop
Drip
Drop

Spilling from the big, dark clouds,
It splattered on the roof.

Drip
Drop
Drip
Drop

My mother came, knocked loudly.
I only lay frozen.

Knock
Knock
Knock
Knock

"Are you alright?" she questioned.
My lips felt frozen shut.

Knock
Knock
Knock
Knock

The rain's power over me
Was what frightened me most.

Drip
Drop
Drip
Drop

Fear can be a funny thing,
But an awful one, too.

Drip
Drop
Drip
Drop

And so, not knowing why, I
Trembled when the rain came.

Reviews

[Asante]

I enjoyed the melancholy nature that you held tightly throughout, along with such simple, yet strong word usage. It made me feel as if I were a silent bystander to the entire piece as it unfolded. Good work, Ana. :)

[Anastasia_Snow]

Thank you for reading and for the kind comments, Sante!

[Asante]

Anytime, Ana!

[JakeRose]

I can relate to this, lying in my old tent somewhere in a place where it should never rain, but only because I was there, fate decided that it should pour like hell! You can really feel the atmosphere, its great!

[Anastasia_Snow]

Thank you, Jake!

[Ruth]

I like the atmosphere to this, nature is both pleasing and fearful at times, nicely portrayed :)

[Anastasia_Snow]

Thank you for reading and for the kind comments, Poppy!

[iamshadowine]

I love the way you described the sounds that take place. It feels like a background score! Nice work!
keep writing :D

[Anastasia_Snow]

Thank you, Shadowine! I'm glad you liked it!