Away

Sometimes I just want to get away from myself and all the thoughts weighing me down. I guess you have to "empty the cup" to leave space for creativity to bloom...

I long to go away from here
To a place my thoughts can clear
A special place, a quiet spot
Where I explore my every thought.

For here I can not think at all
My mind a torrid, stormy squall
Thoughts, like wind, in all direction
Leave no time for deep reflection.

I yearn to break the frame of time
To concentrate on things sublime
My inner self I'd elevate
To an epiphanic higher state.

Oh, such lofty heights aspire
If only I could un-muck the mire
That invades my mind continually
With vain and petty drudgery.

Away!  I'll push unwanted thoughts
I'll find my own secluded spot
Inside my head, my mind's eye sees
My special place, my quiet spot
Where I explore my every thought
That place of blessed serenity
Is not outside, but inside me

Author's Note

Just looking for any kind of feedback. Thanks in advance for the read! :)

Reviews

[Jack...]

I like this, I like how you changed it up a bit and your message is very clear. I am enjoying reading your work.

[Kenilo Kent]

What a lovely piece of art. Simple and true in itself. Thank you for sharing.

[AnastasiaBetts]

Thank you so much.

[zainul]

The poem flows very well while depicts your aspiration so nicely.
Enjoyed write.

[AnastasiaBetts]

Thank you so much. I'm glad to know it flows - something I was concerned about while writing it. :)

[zainul]

You are always welcome.
I appreciate your concern for the quality of your works.
I think this is a precious attribute that I should learn from you.

[Lily Mae]

I so understand this.. sometimes its about looking at it and pushing through those stagnant thoughts and forcing out the old to make the room for the new.. Excellent write..x

[AnastasiaBetts]

Thank you so much for the read and the comment. I guess thisis the struggle of ist writers...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i see me in this write...where is that serenity, where is that spot i can escape to for introspection...

to get away from the flurry of thoughts going in every direction, dealing with have to's---not with want to's---

life just keeps throwing curves at us and we have to spend the time figuring out how to hit them out of the park...so they'll be room for "me, myself and i"

you are very smooth in your phrasing..this has nice rhythm to it.

jacob

[AnastasiaBetts]

Thank you so much for your read and your comments. And, thanks for the complement on the rhythm.... It's something that I really worked at in this poem. :)