All on a Sudden , A night became unfathomably void..,
and I got surprised....;
The next morning , the door-bell rang uncharacteristically happy and loud, I got a healthy ,lump-some money-order to become speechless...........!!
Later, A letter made everything clear; A business group , called " You Dream, We trim",
has bought the copyright of all possible dreams and the subsequent colours,
As they wish to dish out some real-life based reel entities........,
they wrote, they have even bought the copyright of pitch dark colour, to make
the night scenes more realistic..........!!
I thought, I got rid of the bitter-sweet old inventories...,
and sincerely I didn't mind;
As I felt, I got paid more than I should have got . But the fact that the brand new dreams will be taken away before I smell them at least thrice , left me endlessly scared ....
I could not relish the "sudden flood of fortune" ..!! I glued the lucrative envelope back and kept it on my reading table...
I started thinking....about the Future.. ;
I'm still thinking...------
It seems, that "Disposal" is not always very easy ..!!
you weave an eloquent descriptive tale of flights of fancy, promises of dreams unfolding only to find out that the gold was merely faerie dust in one's hands, with incredible insightful imagery of feelings
pleasing rhyme and flow.
a very enjoyable read, profound in its foreboding of careless promises. brilliant write, Anand,
i very much enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing & pen on. *xox*
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so kind of you dear. you got it pretty much right :) love you so much :)
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you're very welcome, Anand. Glad i got something right lol -- much love back. :))
Sometimes when we nurture a dream for a time, it then becomes a very emotional moment parting from it... to begin creating a new one...Beautifully said!
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thanks a lot Divya for the kind review. Yes, detachment needs a lot of practice, a lot of strength .. read morethanks a lot Divya for the kind review. Yes, detachment needs a lot of practice, a lot of strength .
you weave an eloquent descriptive tale of flights of fancy, promises of dreams unfolding only to find out that the gold was merely faerie dust in one's hands, with incredible insightful imagery of feelings
pleasing rhyme and flow.
a very enjoyable read, profound in its foreboding of careless promises. brilliant write, Anand,
i very much enjoyed this. Thanks for sharing & pen on. *xox*
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10 Years Ago
so kind of you dear. you got it pretty much right :) love you so much :)
10 Years Ago
you're very welcome, Anand. Glad i got something right lol -- much love back. :))
Wow, what an interesting concept that a company has set out to buy up dreams and colors. There is no price you could really put on that, as lovely as it seems to get paid for the things we dream, they would no longer be ours if we let them be taken like that. I like your thoughtfulness and cohesive idea in this. I was thrown by all the ellipsis used so much at the end of the stanzas. I feel like some of the ideas would hit harder and move on to the next if they were just ended with a period or other punctuation. The elipses causes a momentary pause which draws out the idea to me, but then you move on through the story. Perhaps, this was by design? If so, I can see where you might be going with using it, but I feel like it loses something. Well done, though! I really enjoyed it!
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Sarai , you really explained it well :) thank you so much :)
Some dreams are meant to be disposed of...fleeting fancies, others are meant to be cherished and remain unsold no matter what the cost to the dreamer. I like the idea of this one; extremely unique in terms of your metaphors, which you carried throughout quite nicely. I'm not sure about the format--I think you could revise the use of punctuation a little bit, it doesn't quite seem uniform and doesn't gel as well as it could with the grand ideas that you have presented in this one. So, concept is a definite BRAVO for me...formatting/punctuation, perhaps needs a little more control. Overall, well done.
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thank you dear. I'll certainly work on that part. good suggestion from you as always.
Love yo.. read morethank you dear. I'll certainly work on that part. good suggestion from you as always.
Love you :)
Well, this is very thought provoking. Some dreams I would gladly sell, others never. Looking deeper, and deeper,....I am thinking of my attic....disposal is a no go, go nowhere, thought. Yes the attic is full, as are my dreams!
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Thank you so much Daffy :) glad that you found substance in it :)