Deceased Mourning Dove

Shoot me and destroy my chest ,
without giving  even a second thought;
Wait and watch , until I die .

After you see an intense vermillion patch
passionately spreading over my stainless shirt ,
you might like to carve on the forehead
of my carcass-
"Deceased Mourning Dove"

Rest  assured that,
by taking my life , you won't invite the scourge of God.

To let you know,
Since the prehistoric ages my life has always been
valued by the metallic cartridges ,
not by the currencies you deal with.

Tremored, taken aback ,
Since time immemorial I have remained the same ;
speechless forever,
in the ancient, prescribed way.

Reviews

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

This is a societal piece...one that sheds a strong light upon the world as we know it. I like the metaphorical nature of this one, and the way that you have said so much by saying so little. The imagery is great, and the message speaks for itself. I particularly liked the second to last stanza...very strong.

[Anand Sehgal]

Glad to receive your review. Now I am into an introspection mode..:)

[B-poet]

Loved the written format. It's a metaphorical message that everyone should at least acknowledge nowadays as a profound truth within society. Great work. A thought-provoking read. :)

[Anand Sehgal]

Thanks a lot BP

[Eddie Phillips]

So much loss of innocence in this world. I love the passages from the middle part of the poem. They are true and to the point. No sense of compassion exists for life anymore it seems. Powerful poem..thank you for sharing.

[Anand Sehgal]

glad that you liked it :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

I believe in the metaphor of the dove, that there is peace to be found...and it stirs within each and everyone of us. Your poetry always has these layers, Anand...giving us time to "chew" on it!

So tell me, how's the inspiration for India coming?

[Anand Sehgal]

Thanks Kelly so much, are you asking inspiration in the context of this write?

[Kelly Scheppers]

I asked you if you ever wrote a poem about India, remember?

[Anand Sehgal]

oh yeah..! I will post one soon , I will pick up one from my diary :D

[Vani Jalagar]

"Deceased Mourning Dove" the coined title itself depicts the decline in peace and prosperity...Peace comes from within, it is impossible to obtain peace in the outer world until we make peace with ourselves.
great write Anand :)

[Anand Sehgal]

Thank you Vani for the visit and review :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Keep singing little dove and we will have our peace. Powerful write.

[Anand Sehgal]

The dove has to stay. For the sake of us :) thanks Pryde

[Pryde Foltz]

Your poem was so gripping; it inspired a short senyru. I've just RR'd.

[Muse]

The title alone intrigues me. If the Dove represents peace and it is deceased....then the victim is without hope? I felt a certain amount of irony within your poem. Just wow...read you again, trying to wrap my head around it all. It almost reads like a self inflicted wound. Beckoning the person that reads you to take a final stab or poke. Yeah it's okay you say...it will hurt for a little bit, but there will be no victory without acquiring enlightenment.

[Anand Sehgal]

yess it tells about "self inflicted wound". Loved your expression, you made my night :)

[MsJewel]

You write with such emotion...with power and yet...there is a softness here that has me feeling sorry for this dove - although your words go much deeper than that. A thought provoking poem and a pleasure to read.
:) Julie

[Anand Sehgal]

Thank you so much dear , for your visit :D

[shallimarRose]

Thought provoking.. I am going to have to come back again to absorb.. Im cooking dinner now.. Wow so powerful.. Rose

[Anand Sehgal]

:) come back and let me know , whether you liked it or not :)

[shallimarRose]

I love it I am just not sure I fully understand it...

"Since the prehistoric ages my life has always been
valued by the metallic cartridges ,
not by the currencies you deal with. "
It feels like you are talking about literal bullets here .. Like perhaps you were born and raised among violence..? Would love this poem explained.. xo Rose

[Anand Sehgal]

No, fortunately I grew up in a tranquil environment. this metaphor I used to explain that life doesn't get its due in the way it should be, rather it gets always something unexpected, faces weird things. These are not literal bullets :)
thanks for asking Rose .

[shallimarRose]

phew, good... lol thanks for explaning.. Rose

[Anand Sehgal]

:D no worries, it was my pleasure

[Joyce S. Greene]

After reading Lydi's comment, I can see her point is well taken, Anand. But when I read your poem, I saw a mourning dove, attacked for the sport of it, and voiceless to protect itself. That could, in fact, be a metaphor for a good number of things - rabbits, deer, unorganized laborers, the poor, etc, etc and so forth. This is a brilliant poem and I felt for that poor creature. Write on!

[Anand Sehgal]

Thank you dear, Pen will not stop so soon, a promise :)

[Anand Sehgal]

yes indeed metaphor for a good number of things. you have caught the spirit correctly .

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was very deep and well written. It speaks volumes. You did a wonderful job

[Anand Sehgal]

thank you So much :)