Etcetera 3

A hidden current,
        Well dressed quicksand ,
                   A stiff  test !

                         A courageous trier ,
                             An occasional triumph,
                                Wave of a new trend !

    Stupid way of imitation,
           Intrusion of glitches ,
                Immersion of institution !

                                  

                                     A period of suspension,

                                           Act of self-questioning ,

                                                An upgraded screening test !

                    

Reviews

[Heartshaped Rain]

As I read these I wonder about the inspiration for each as they are not readily apparent in what subject they have in common but they are intriguing and give one some food for thought, something to make more wrinkles in our brains. I enjoyed the structure, and at first glance thought them to be senryus but realized the were not which peaked my interest even more as they all seem "stand alone".

[Anand Sehgal]

thank you so much for reading it, it is a collage-like metaphor based write. Disconnected yet linked . :)

[Prritiy]

struggle in life is never ending process, we have to go through various tests in our life but to sail through it successfully we need to fight with sense and patience.

very nice creation.

[Anand Sehgal]

Yes Prritiy, life runs in a self-correcting loop :)

[Prritiy]

............... :)

[Lydia Shutter]

We are forever testing ourselves and often we are our own harshest critics. I liked the way you presented the stanzas here. Very effective. Lydi**

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a lot Lydi. Glad that you felt connected :)

[ron]

i like this. Testing our selfs and trying to improve on our mistakes. Trying to see the pit falls ahead before we step in to them.

[Anand Sehgal]

Thank you my friend for the kind review

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Funny how we all seem to float in the same circles, even when we try to stay outside of the current. This is the way of the world, as it ebbs and flows; things come and go from fashion, people change, landscapes change, the "in" changes, and yet life still keeps going forward. Great metaphor for life in general...creative.

I would suggest in the last stanza that you make the last line in concert with the previous stanzas, form wise...so just tab it over and space it like the others--just a visual and flow thing. Otherwise...well done!

[Anand Sehgal]

Thanks a lot dear Sarah, I rearranged it :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

I must admit, I'm not getting this...sorry, but I'll keep trying. It's the irish in me!

My best,
Kelly

[Anand Sehgal]

no worries, be happy :) thanks for reading btw :D

[Rhiti Bose]

When I read it the first time, I didn't get it. So I slowed down and read for a second time. It's brilliant. Aren't we all doing the same thing, giving ourselves an upgraded screening test..... the process of self correction and realisation is just like the steps of this poem. I don't know if I am getting it all wrong or making any sense.

[Anand Sehgal]

you got it 100 % correct. thank you ma'am :)

[Anand Sehgal]

metaphors are frame of reference over here :)

[NA]

Interesting read hun...thought provoking :) x

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a ton dear :) :) kind comment indeed :)

[K. Louis]

This reminded me of covering up the missing parts, a facade.
I really like the contrast in the first stanza. Interesting piece!

[Anand Sehgal]

:) glad the you liked it :)