Mystic Metaphor

Today we have nothing to speak out;

What prevails  is the self-doubt ;

A sudden victory  fails to trigger rejoice,

The treasure  that is lost is the voice .

 

Yet all the conflicts choose to live on ,

Sheltered by the “head and heart” siphon;

Remains as it is, the goal to strive for,

Life goes on like a mystic metaphor .

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

The elusive essence of life is much like a mystic metaphor! We do not act as we are held back by fear, self-doubt, and the voice to speak up for that which we believe in!
The conflicts do not end as we choose not to end them - mind over matter, heart over reality, which shall it be? It is a puzzle to far too many!

[Anand Sehgal]

We are afraid of living and we are afraid of death too. !!

[Calissa Knox]

This stanza really spoke to me,

"A sudden victory fails to trigger rejoice,

The treasure that is lost is the voice."

An absolutely beautiful, and very insightful piece of writing! I thoroughly enjoyed this!

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a lot dear , Glad the write made you think a bit .:)

Love :)

[Rachelle]

The journey awaits
An invitation for you
To unravel the knots
Of your existence.
Shall you seek
the comfort of shelter?
Or venture to the edge
Ready to fall?
The adventure is there
For the taking.
The mystery of who you are
Is your metaphor.

[Anand Sehgal]

An awesome write from you. I loved it. A big big thank you :)

[FlatLineBeauty]

This really picked at my brain which for me is always good. You got my wheels turning. Good job. xo Winter

[May Flowers]

Very thought provoking!! I read this over a few times and each time I found something new!

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a lot my dear friend :) glad that you found some meaning in it :)

[Heartshaped Rain]

I love the last line, life goes on like a mystic metaphor.

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a lot for reading the piece :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Life goes on like a mystic metaphor.

What a fantastic line. I wish I'd thought of that. Great poem.

And now for a giggle. Here's my play on your line--Life goes on like a mystic, sadistic metaphor.

[Jack...]

I really liked this. Nice style, nice form and very nice rhyme. I love the entire feeling of this.

[Anand Sehgal]

Thanks a ton Sir. I'm very Glad :)

[MsJewel]

This is lovely. I love the last line - the perfect finish. I too would get rid of the comma's - they aren't needed. The poem has a beautiful flow without them. I enjoyed this one very much. :) Julie

[Anand Sehgal]

next time commas will not be there. thanks for comment Julie :)

[Onku Ghosh]

''Life goes on like a mystique metaphor" --very apt and beautifully said. Your choice of words is good and the rhyme scheme perfect.As always a beautiful write.

[Anand Sehgal]

Thank you Ma'am. Glad that you liked :)